Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Clarify and correct basic vocabulary and grammar, give one clear topic sentence and up to two supporting details using linking words. Be specific about the item (bike) and activities. For example, say whether you had a bike, describe who you rode with, where you rode, and how often. Avoid filler words like “uh” and incorrect words like “bag” or “read” when you mean “bike” or “rode.”

例: Yes, I did. I had a small bicycle when I was about seven, and I often rode it to play with my neighbours. For example, every weekend I would ride to the park with two friends, which helped me learn to balance and ride longer distances.

提案: Make a direct statement about popularity, then give specific supporting reasons using linking words. Use correct vocabulary such as “bikes” or “bike-sharing” instead of “bags.” Explain who uses them, where (cities, campuses), and why (convenient, cheap, eco-friendly). Reduce filled pauses. Keep it to 2–3 sentences maximum.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in cities with bike-sharing schemes. For instance, many commuters use rented bikes for short trips because they are cheap and convenient, and young people often prefer them for short journeys around campus.

× Yes, definitely. Uh I have a bag when I child and I always read it to play with my friends or go to school or even I can write it. To.

✓ Yes, definitely. I had a bike when I was a child, and I always rode it to play with my friends, to go to school, or even to practice riding by myself.

Multiple errors: (1) Past tense issue (ID 5): speaker is talking about childhood, so present tense 'have' should be past 'had'. (2) Sentence structure errors (ID 26): 'when I child' is incorrect; should be 'when I was a child'. (3) Verb selection and form: 'bag' is likely a mis-saying for 'bike'; 'read it to play' is incorrect — 'rode it to play' is correct (verb choice and past tense). (4) Parallel structure and infinitive form: list items should use infinitives consistently: 'to play', 'to go', 'to practice'. Suggestion: use past simple for past events, correct nouns ('bike'), choose appropriate verbs ('rode'), and maintain parallel infinitive forms in lists. Please note corrections focus on grammar types listed (IDs 5 and 26).

× Yes, I, uh, my country has, uh, shared bags and uh, uh, if, uh, if people want to go somewhere, uh, they may be to choose this, uh, transport, uh, transport way.

✓ Yes. In my country there are shared bikes, and if people want to go somewhere, they may choose this mode of transport.

Errors corrected according to the grammar list: (1) 'There be' issue (ID 3) and article/word order (ID 17/22): Original phrasing 'my country has, uh, shared bags' is awkward; the natural structure is 'In my country there are shared bikes.' Use 'there are' for existence with plural countable noun. (2) Word choice and plural (ID 1): 'bags' is incorrect; likely 'bikes' was intended. (3) Verb/form error (ID 26 and 6): 'they may be to choose' is ungrammatical; correct modal usage is 'they may choose' or 'they might choose.' Suggestion: use 'there is/there are' for existence, choose correct noun ('bikes'), and use modal verbs followed directly by base verb ('may choose').