Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer grammatically correct, concise and natural: use past tense for childhood, avoid repetition, and add a brief reason and plan. Keep to 2–4 sentences and use linking words for coherence.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because I never learned how to ride. However, I would like to learn in the future so I can cycle to nearby places and enjoy exercising outdoors.

提案: Be more organized and precise: start with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid contradictory or unclear statements (e.g., ‘skid easily’ contradicts usefulness).

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Firstly, many streets are narrow, so motorcycles and bicycles are easier to maneuver than cars. Secondly, they are cheaper to run and park, which makes them a practical choice for daily commuting.

× No, I don't have a bike when I was a child because because I I don't know how to ride a bike.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because I didn't know how to ride one.

Tense is inconsistent: 'when I was a child' requires past tense. Use past simple 'didn't have' and 'didn't know'. Also remove repeated words and replace 'a bike' with 'one' to avoid repetition.

× Nevertheless I I don't know even how to ride a cycle.

✓ Nevertheless, I didn't even know how to ride a cycle.

Again the time reference is past, so use past simple 'didn't know' instead of present 'don't know'. Also remove duplicate 'I' and place 'even' before the verb phrase for natural word order.

× But in future I would like to learn how to ride a bike.

✓ But in the future I would like to learn how to ride a bike.

Missing article 'the' before 'future' is needed in this context. 'Would like to' correctly expresses a desire about the future; add 'the' for natural phrasing.

× Yes, yes, of course. Bikes are very popular in my country because the roads are very narrow.

✓ Yes, of course. Bikes are very popular in my country because the roads are very narrow.

No major tense error, but remove redundant 'yes' for fluency. Sentence uses present simple correctly to state a general fact.

× So when for example, if there is rain, so that time bikes are more useful than cars and it will go, it will skid easily more, I mean.

✓ For example, when it rains, bikes are more useful than cars, but they can skid more easily.

The original mixes conjunctions ('so', 'when', 'if') redundantly. Use a clear clause: 'when it rains' (correct time clause) and contrast with 'but'. Replace 'it will go, it will skid easily more' with 'they can skid more easily' for correct subject reference, modal use ('can') for possibility, and proper adverb placement ('more easily').