Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and use past tense consistently; avoid hesitations and redundant phrases. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. For example, say you didn’t have a bike, explain why (briefly) and add a concise detail about your feelings or a memory. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and correct tense errors (use 'didn't' and 'ride' instead of 'have not' and 'drive').

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. I wanted one because I loved watching other children ride, and I used to dream about cycling to the park on weekends.

提案: Organize the answer with a clear topic sentence and specific supporting reasons; avoid fragmented phrases and filler words. Use linking words (however, because, especially) and correct grammar (e.g., 'few' vs 'not many'). Provide one clear reason and an example or comparison. Keep to 2–3 sentences and choose precise vocabulary like 'common' or 'popular'.

例: I don’t think bikes were very popular in my country when I was young. Because many families couldn’t afford them, few children—especially girls—had bikes, so cycling wasn’t a common activity.

× No, I have not, but I wish I had because I like, I used to like, uh, to drive bikes.

✓ No, I did not, but I wish I had because I liked, I used to like, uh, riding bikes.

The question asks about having a bike when the student was a child (past time), so past simple should be used instead of present perfect ('I have not' -> 'I did not'). 'I like, I used to like' is inconsistent; 'used to' already marks past habit so keep 'I used to like'. Also after 'like' with the activity form prefer the gerund 'riding' rather than the infinitive 'to drive' when talking about the activity in general. Suggestion: use past simple for past events, keep 'used to' for past habits, and use gerund for activities. Grammar problem type ID:5

× In my childhood there was uh, no money children riding a bikes, especially girls.

✓ In my childhood there were not many children riding bikes, especially girls.

This sentence has several issues: 'there was' is singular but 'children' is plural so use 'there were' (subject-verb agreement). 'no money children' is ungrammatical; likely intended 'not many children' or 'few children' (quantifier choice). 'a bikes' mixes singular article with plural noun; remove the article and use plural 'bikes'. Suggestion: use 'there were not many children riding bikes' or 'few children rode bikes'. Grammar problem type ID:1

× So there was few not that much.

✓ So there were few, not that many.

Again 'there was' mismatches plural reference 'few' so use 'there were'. 'not that much' is used with uncountable nouns; with countable plural use 'not that many'. Also punctuation/word order clarified with a comma. Suggestion: use 'there were few' or 'there were not that many' for countable plural nouns. Grammar problem type ID:1

× It was not so popular, uh, riding bikes in my country.

✓ Riding bikes was not very popular in my country.

The original word order is awkward. Move the subject 'Riding bikes' to the front for clarity. 'Not so popular' is acceptable but 'not very popular' is more natural. Maintain past tense 'was' for past situation. Suggestion: place the gerund phrase as the subject and use natural intensifier 'very'. Grammar problem type ID:6}]}{