Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid ending abruptly with phrases like "That's it." Also vary vocabulary (e.g., "own" instead of "have") and include a brief reason or memory to enrich the answer.

例: No, I didn't own a bike as a child because I never learned to ride one. Instead, I used roller skates a lot, especially in the park near my home, which kept me active and helped me balance. Occasionally a friend would lend me a bike, but I preferred skating.

提案: Structure your answer with a clear topic sentence, then give a specific reason and a brief comparative example using linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g., "I went to Italy" and "in Italy" are redundant). Use precise vocabulary like "more common" or "widespread" and give one concrete reason why bikes are less popular at home.

例: I don't think bicycles are very popular in my country because most people prefer cars for convenience and the cycling infrastructure is limited. For example, when I visited Italy on vacation, cycling was much more common there due to bike lanes and a stronger cycling culture.

× No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because I didn't know how to ride one.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because I didn't know how to ride one.

The sentence is grammatically correct in past tense and requires no change. It correctly uses past simple for past facts and abilities (didn't have, didn't know).

× But I had roller skates and I knew how to ride those.

✓ But I had roller skates, and I knew how to use them.

'Knew how to ride those' is understandable but 'use them' is more natural for roller skates. The original uses past simple correctly; change is stylistic to match collocation: we 'use' skates rather than 'ride' them. Also add a comma before the coordinating conjunction for clarity.

× That's it.

✓ That's it.

This short response is acceptable conversationally and grammatically; no change needed.

× I don't think bikes are as popular as they should be because I don't see people riding bikes so often, but when I was in Italy, I went to Italy for vacation some time ago, people were using bikes much more regularly than here in Turkey.

✓ I don't think bikes are as popular as they should be because I don't see people riding them very often, but when I went to Italy for vacation some time ago, people used bikes much more regularly than here in Turkey.

Multiple issues: replace the repeated phrase 'I was in Italy, I went to Italy' with a single past clause 'when I went to Italy'. Use 'them' to avoid repetition ('riding them'). Consistency in past narration: 'went' and 'used' (simple past) are appropriate for completed past events. 'People were using bikes much more regularly' is grammatically acceptable (past continuous) but 'used' (simple past) is clearer for habitual past action. Also change 'so often' to 'very often' for register and move commas to separate clauses correctly.