Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clearer, more grammatical and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb tense, use correct vocabulary (e.g., "bike" not "write"), and avoid repetition. Keep to a maximum of four sentences.

例: Yes, I did. My father gave me a small blue bike for my tenth birthday, and I rode it to school every day for nearly ten years. However, as I grew taller the bike became too small, so I eventually stopped using it. It holds fond memories because I learned to ride independently on that bike.

提案: Answer directly, then support with clear reasons and linking words. Use correct plural/singular forms and clearer vocabulary ("popular", "electric bikes"). Avoid vague phrasing like "innovations comes." Limit to three or four sentences and give a specific example or trend.

例: Yes, traditional bicycles used to be very popular, especially for children commuting to school. However, in recent years many people have switched to electric bikes because they are faster and require less effort. As a result, the number of people riding conventional bikes has declined in many cities.

× Yes I did I do have a 5.1 was a child and my father gave me as a gift for my birthday.

✓ Yes, I did. I had a 5 when I was a child, and my father gave it to me as a birthday gift.

The student mixes tenses and has several structural errors. Use simple past 'had' and 'was' for past facts. '5.1' seems incorrect for '5' (bike size) and 'gave me as a gift for my birthday' should be 'gave it to me as a birthday gift'. Also add necessary punctuation and article. Suggest using clear past tense sequence: 'I had a 5 when I was a child, and my father gave it to me as a birthday gift.'

× I used to write it to go to school every day and I've been wearing that bicycle for almost 10 years and now that I I was getting taller and I.

✓ I used to ride it to go to school every day, and I rode that bicycle for almost 10 years, but then I started getting taller.

Multiple errors: 'write' is incorrect verb; should be 'ride' (verb choice error mapped to verb-ing since original intended continuous/habitual action). 'I've been wearing' is wrong verb for using a bicycle; use 'rode' (past habitual) or 'used' for duration in past. The sentence is incomplete and mixes present perfect with past continuous. Use consistent past tense: 'used to ride' for habitual past and 'rode... for almost 10 years' for duration. End with 'started getting taller' to complete the thought.

× Do you think bikes are popular in your country? Student: It was very popular back then.

✓ They were very popular back then.

Subject-verb agreement and pronoun choice: 'bikes' is plural, so use 'they' and plural verb 'were', not 'it was'. 'It was' treats 'bikes' as singular. Use 'They were very popular back then.'

× Everybody used to have ones to write it to school.

✓ Everybody used to have one to ride to school.

Pronoun and noun form errors: 'ones' is unnecessary; use 'one' after 'have' to mean 'a bike'. 'write it' is incorrect verb and pronoun; should be 'ride' and no extra object. Correct phrase: 'Everybody used to have one to ride to school.'

× But ever since the innovations comes, it seems like everybody is turning into the your electric bicycle now.

✓ But ever since the innovation came, it seems like everybody is switching to electric bicycles now.

Tense and article errors: 'comes' should be past 'came' because the innovation occurred and changed habits. 'Innovations' plural and 'the' are awkward; 'the innovation' or 'recent innovations' can work. 'Turning into the your electric bicycle' is ungrammatical: use 'switching to electric bicycles' or 'turning to electric bicycles'. Also match plurality: 'everybody... bicycles' or 'everybody is switching to an electric bike'.

× So it was not as popular as back then.

✓ So they are not as popular as they were back then.

Comparative tense and reference errors: 'it' incorrectly refers to plural 'bikes'; use 'they'. Mix of past and present: the speaker likely means that bikes today are not as popular as in the past, so use present 'are not as popular' and past 'were... back then'. Suggest: 'So they are not as popular as they were back then.'