Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and accurate. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (use past tense consistency), and give specific, coherent details using linking words. Avoid unclear phrases like “by grey trainers” and repeat times. Keep answers under five sentences.

例: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. It was pink with grey training wheels, and I loved riding it in the afternoons. I usually rode with my friends in the nearby park because it was safe and had smooth paths. Riding together helped us learn new tricks and stay active.

提案: Answer directly, use correct grammar and linking words, and provide specific examples or reasons. Use present/past appropriately (e.g., “have become popular since the pandemic”) and avoid repetition. Mention who uses bikes and for what purposes with concrete examples.

例: Yes, bikes have become more popular in my country since the pandemic. Many people now cycle to work or school to avoid crowded buses, and in rural areas like my province people often ride for exercise and short errands. For example, I see delivery couriers and students cycling daily, and local parks are busier with casual cyclists.

× Yes, I did have a bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

Using 'did have' is grammatically possible but unnecessary in a simple past statement; the correct, more natural form is the simple past 'had'. Use 'did' auxiliary for emphasis or in negatives/questions. Suggestion: say 'I had a bike' for a simple past fact.

× It is a color pink by grey trainers and I used to love it at afternoon.

✓ It was pink with grey trainers, and I used to love it in the afternoons.

Multiple issues: tense should be past ('was') to match 'when I was a child'. 'Color pink by grey trainers' is incorrect word order and preposition; use 'pink with grey trainers' to describe color and accessories. 'At afternoon' is wrong preposition and article; use 'in the afternoon' or 'in the afternoons'. Also add a comma and conjunction to join clauses. Suggestion: keep past tense and use correct adjective order and preposition: 'It was pink with grey trainers, and I used to love it in the afternoons.'

× In the afternoon I usually bike at the park with my friends.

✓ In the afternoons I usually ride my bike in the park with my friends.

'Bike' as a verb is informal in some dialects but 'ride my bike' is clearer and standard. 'In the afternoon' should be plural or kept general as 'in the afternoons' to match 'usually'. Preposition 'at the park' is less natural than 'in the park'. Maintain present habitual tense: 'I usually ride my bike in the park.' Suggestion: use 'ride my bike' and 'in the park' for natural phrasing.

× Yes, I think there's a lot of people that uses the bike ever since pandemic had ever since pandemic, I saw a lot of people that uses the bike as a mode of transportation, especially here in the province, as well as the uses a bike for exercising.

✓ Yes, I think there are a lot of people who have used bikes since the pandemic. I saw many people using bikes as a mode of transportation, especially here in the province, and many who use bikes for exercising.

This sentence has many errors: 'there's a lot of people' mixes singular contraction 'there's' with plural 'people'—use 'there are'. 'That uses' is wrong for plural; use 'who use' or 'people who have used'. 'Ever since pandemic had' is ungrammatical; use 'since the pandemic'. Repetition and tense inconsistency: use present perfect 'have used' or present 'use' depending on meaning. Also split into two sentences for clarity. 'The uses a bike' is incorrect; remove extra article and use 'use bikes' or 'use bikes for exercising'. Suggestion: say 'there are a lot of people who have used bikes since the pandemic' and 'I saw many people using bikes as transportation... and many who use them for exercise.'