Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Сократите количество заполнителей (например, «uh», «umm»), исправьте грамматику и порядок слов, используйте чёткое вступительное предложение и одно-два поддерживающих предложения с конкретной информацией. Например, используйте правильные времена (past simple), согласование подлежащего и сказуемого и логическую последовательность: сначала ответьте прямо, затем добавьте детали о возрасте или опыте и закончите коротким заключением.

例: No, I didn't have my own bike, but my older brother did, and we often rode his together. I started riding on a small, no-pedal balance bike when I was about three or four, which helped me learn to balance quickly.

提案: Уменьшите неопределённость («maybe», «everybody peoples»), используйте точные слова и структуру: тема → причина → пример. Приводите одно конкретное объяснение и одно краткое примечание о пользе. Убедитесь в правильном согласовании и выборе слов (например, «many people», «bicycles are useful»).

例: Yes, I think bicycles are very popular in my country because many people use them for short trips and commuting. For example, students and office workers often cycle to save money on transport, and cycling is also a popular way to exercise.

× No, I didn't, but uh, my, uh, older brother have and we, umm, we ride the bicycle together and but I have the another no stop. Actually, when I was, uh, three or four years I have.

✓ No, I didn't, but my older brother had one and we used to ride the bicycle together. Actually, when I was three or four years old I had one.

The sentence contains multiple subject-verb agreement and tense errors. 'Older brother have' is incorrect because 'brother' (singular) requires past tense 'had' (Grammar problem type ID: 27 and 5). 'We ride the bicycle together' should be 'we used to ride the bicycle together' to indicate past habitual action (Grammar problem type ID: 5 and 6). 'I have the another no stop' is ungrammatical; corrected to 'I had one' and adding 'years old' after an age is required. Suggestion: Use correct past tense forms for actions that happened in the past, ensure singular subjects pair with singular verb forms, and use idiomatic phrases for age and habitual past actions.

× Yes, actually I think so because the everyone peoples have maybe bikes and bikes is the good things when you go anywhere and like maybe exercising you can do it with bikes and.

✓ Yes, I think so because many people have bikes, and bikes are good for going places and for exercise.

Multiple errors: 'the everyone peoples' is wrong; use 'many people' or 'everyone' (Grammar problem type ID: 14 and 12). 'Have maybe bikes' has wrong word order and modal; corrected to 'have bikes'. 'Bikes is the good things' has subject-verb agreement and article issues: plural 'bikes' takes 'are' and do not need 'the' or 'things' ('are good for'). 'When you go anywhere and like maybe exercising you can do it with bikes and' is awkward and redundant; corrected to 'for going places and for exercise.' Suggestion: Use correct quantifier + noun ('many people'), match plural subjects with plural verbs ('bikes are'), and simplify phrases for clarity.