Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more grammatically accurate, concise, and add a clear topic sentence plus one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct tense and articles, use correct adjective (color) and possibly name of color. Avoid repetition of the examiner's question. Keep within 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes. I had a bike when I was a child. It was bright red and had a small basket on the front, so I often rode it to my friend’s house after school. Because the roads near my home were quiet, I spent many hours practicing tricks and racing with my neighbors.

× Oh yeah, When I was child I had a bike.

✓ Oh yeah, when I was a child I had a bike.

The sentence is missing the article 'a' before 'child' which is a problem with article usage related to present/past context; this falls under Present tense issue because the time reference 'when I was a child' is a fixed past time expression that requires the correct noun phrase 'a child'. Also capitalize 'when' only if starting a sentence; here it should be lowercase. Suggestion: use 'a child' for the noun phrase and keep capitalization consistent.

× It was a Fred color and I played a lot with it.

✓ It was a red color and I played with it a lot.

The word 'Fred' is incorrect; likely intended adjective is 'red' (color). This is an adjective error. Also adverb placement: 'a lot' is more natural at the end of the clause 'I played with it a lot.' Suggestion: replace the incorrect adjective with the correct color word and move 'a lot' to the end for natural adverb placement.