Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer grammatically correct, more coherent and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb tenses, possessives and word order, and avoid repetition. For example, mention who gave the bike, describe it briefly, and say why it was memorable.

例: Yes. I had a small motorcycle when I was a child. My father gave it to me when I was about ten, and I used to ride around the roads in our village. Because I learned to ride on that bike and spent a lot of time with friends, it holds many happy memories for me.

提案: Give a direct opinion first, then support it with clear, specific reasons or examples. Use linking words (for example, because, so, also) and correct pronouns and tense. Avoid unclear references and redundant words. Mention who rides bikes, when, and why they are popular if possible.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Many people use them for short trips and commuting because they are affordable and convenient in heavy traffic. For example, my brother bought a bike when he was 21 so he could travel to work more easily.

× Yes I have a small bike.

✓ Yes, I had a small bike.

The examiner asked about having a bike when the student was a child (past time). The verb tense should be past ('had') not present ('have'). Suggestion: use past simple for states in the past: 'I had...'.

× When I am child my father give me a 1.6 engine bike give me I ride to Rd. in my village.

✓ When I was a child my father gave me a 1.6 engine bike and I rode it on the road in my village.

Multiple errors: tense mismatch ('am' -> 'was') and wrong verb forms ('give' -> 'gave' past simple), missing conjunction and pronoun reference ('give me I ride' is ungrammatical). Also 'Rd.' should be 'road' and 'ride to Rd.' corrected to 'rode it on the road'. Suggestion: use past simple for events in childhood, use conjunctions to connect clauses, and include correct objects and prepositions.

× Actually this bike is may have any memories for me for the reason.

✓ Actually this bike has many memories for me because of that.

The original uses incorrect modal/auxiliary and pronoun structure ('is may have any memories'). Use 'has' to indicate possession of memories, and 'many' rather than 'any' for a positive statement. Also replace 'for the reason' with 'because of that' or 'for that reason'. Suggestion: use 'has many memories for me' or 'holds many memories for me'.

× Yes of course many people ride bike in hours and they actually my brother have one bike she he he give my father and when he 21 is actually more more.

✓ Yes, of course many people ride bikes in my country. Actually my brother has a bike; he got it from my father when he was 21.

Multiple issues: tense and number ('ride bike' -> 'ride bikes'), awkward phrase 'in hours' removed and replaced with 'in my country' to answer popularity question. Pronoun and verb agreement ('my brother have' -> 'my brother has'), wrong verb tense for receiving the bike ('give' -> 'got'), and time reference needs past tense ('when he was 21'). Suggestion: use plural for general statements ('people ride bikes'), ensure subject-verb agreement and past simple for past events.