Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words (e.g., because, so, for example). Limit to around 3–4 sentences and vary vocabulary (use 'enjoyed' once, replace repeated phrases with alternatives like 'loved' or 'spent my afternoons').

例: Yes. I had a bike as a child and I loved riding it around the park in front of our apartment. Because I learned to ride very early, I spent many afternoons cycling with my friends and gaining confidence on busy paths. I hope to start cycling again soon for exercise and enjoyment.

提案: Give a direct opinion first and support it with specific observations and reasons. Avoid contradictions (saying both 'not popular' and 'has been popular for a long time'). Use linking words (for example, however, because) and provide specific examples (who cycles, where, or why). Keep it to 2–3 concise sentences.

例: I think cycling is moderately popular in my country, especially in coastal areas. For example, I often see families and fitness enthusiasts cycling along the beach path on weekends because it's scenic and safe. However, in many cities people prefer cars or public transport, so cycling isn't widespread everywhere.

× When I was a child I did have a bike.

✓ When I was a child I had a bike.

The sentence uses the auxiliary 'did' with a past tense verb 'have', which is unnecessary in a simple past affirmative sentence. Use the simple past form 'had' without 'did' to express a past state. Suggestion: Use 'I had' for simple past affirmatives.

× I did enjoy riding it around the park in front of our apartment.

✓ I enjoyed riding it around the park in front of our apartment.

The auxiliary 'did' is used with the base form of a verb for emphasis or in negatives/questions. In affirmative past statements, use the past tense 'enjoyed' rather than 'did enjoy' unless you intend emphasis. Suggestion: Use 'I enjoyed' for a normal past statement; keep 'did enjoy' only for emphasis.

× I learned to ride a bike when I was quite young and it was very enjoyable and I hope to ride a bike again soon.

✓ I learned to ride a bike when I was quite young; it was very enjoyable, and I hope to ride a bike again soon.

The sentence is long and needs clearer punctuation to separate ideas. The verbs 'learned' and 'was' correctly use simple past for past events, while 'hope' is present and correctly expresses a current desire. The issue was clarity and sentence structure rather than tense misuse. Suggestion: Add punctuation and a semicolon or commas to separate clauses for readability.

× I'm not 100% sure if they are popular but I do see many people cycling around the beach.

✓ I'm not 100% sure whether they are popular, but I do see many people cycling around the beach.

Using 'if' in reporting doubt is common, but 'whether' is more formal and clearer when presenting two alternatives (popular or not). Also a comma before 'but' improves readability. Suggestion: Use 'whether' for clarity in uncertainty and add a comma before 'but'.

× They do enjoy it but I don't think it's popular.

✓ They enjoy it, but I don't think it's popular.

The auxiliary 'do' is unnecessary in affirmative present-tense sentences unless used for emphasis. Remove 'do' for a neutral statement and add a comma before 'but' for correct punctuation. Suggestion: Use 'They enjoy' for a simple present affirmative.

× It has been popular for a long time.

✓ It has been popular for a long time.

This sentence is grammatically correct: present perfect 'has been' is appropriate to describe a state that started in the past and continues to the present. No correction needed. Suggestion: Keep as is when you mean a continuing state.

× I just think it's a new thing and people enjoy it.

✓ I just think it's a new thing, and people enjoy it.

The verbs are correctly in the present tense, but a comma before 'and' improves readability by separating two independent clauses. Suggestion: Add a comma before coordinating conjunctions that join independent clauses.