Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clear, concise and correct the obvious errors. Start with a direct topic sentence answering the question, then add one or two specific details (where you rode it, how often, or a memorable moment). Use correct word choice (e.g., ‘to go to school’ not ‘to go crime school’) and avoid irrelevant or confusing phrases. Keep it under five sentences and use a linking phrase if you add details (for example, “for example” or “often”).

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I used it almost every day to go to school and visit my friends, which made getting around much easier. For example, I remember racing with my neighbor to the park after classes.

提案: Give a clear, structured answer: start with a direct opinion, then explain with specific supporting details and a linking word (e.g., “however” or “in contrast”). Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences. Mention concrete factors (like geography, public transport, or parking) and give a short example or comparison between areas.

例: Yes, bikes are popular in many parts of Japan, especially in suburban and residential districts where distances are short and parking is limited. However, in major city centers people often prefer public transport or cars because of heavy traffic and longer commutes. For instance, in my town most residents use bicycles for short errands, while commuters take trains into the city.

× They don't want to go like this. Yes, I had a bike when I was a child and it was a convenience to to go crime school.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, and it was convenient for going to cram school.

The original contains an unrelated sentence 'They don't want to go like this.' which is likely out of context and creates a sentence structure error (ID 26). The phrase 'it was a convenience to to go crime school' has multiple issues: incorrect noun form 'convenience' instead of adjective 'convenient', duplicated 'to', wrong infinitive structure, and misspelling 'crime' should be 'cram' (intended meaning: cram school). The corrected sentence removes the irrelevant fragment, uses 'convenient for going to cram school' to match natural English, and keeps past tense consistent. Suggestion: remove unrelated clauses, use adjective 'convenient' with 'for' + gerund or 'to' + verb (e.g., 'convenient to use' or 'convenient for going').

× Yes, it depends on the district in Japan, some some cities, some people in some cities tends to ride bikes rather than cars.

✓ Yes, it depends on the district in Japan. In some cities, people tend to ride bikes rather than cars.

The original has repetition 'some some cities' and a subject-verb agreement error: 'people ... tends' is wrong because 'people' is plural and requires the base verb 'tend' (ID 27). Sentence structure is also cluttered; splitting into two sentences clarifies meaning. Suggestion: remove repeated words, ensure plural subjects take plural verbs (people tend), and punctuate to separate clauses for clarity.

× But in the central city people I think people tend.

✓ But in central cities, I think people tend to use cars more.

The original sentence is fragmented and repeats 'people', creating a sentence structure error (ID 26). It also lacks a clear object or comparative phrase. The correction provides a complete thought that contrasts central-city behavior with other districts and uses a clear verb phrase 'tend to use cars more.' Suggestion: avoid repetitions, complete the comparative idea, and use parallel structure when comparing regions.