Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is unclear and too short. Start with a direct topic sentence that answers the question (e.g. yes or no), then add one or two supporting details (where you rode it, who you rode with, or why you had/didn't have one). Use correct grammar: for past possession say “I had” or “I didn’t have,” and avoid contradictory phrases like “I didn't buy” after saying yes. Keep it to no more than 3–4 short sentences and include a linking word if you add extra information.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I used to ride it around my neighborhood with my friends after school, and we often raced down the small hill near our house. Because my parents encouraged outdoor play, I rode almost every day.

提案: Your response addresses the question but has problems with grammar, clarity and relevance (mention of “bags” seems mistaken). Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No + brief reason), then add two specific supporting details linked with words like “because” or “for example.” Correct vocabulary (“bikes” not “bags”) and more precise examples (who rides them, where, or any cycling culture/events) will improve coherence.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are affordable and convenient for short trips. For example, I often see children riding bikes in parks and students cycling to school, and there are active Facebook groups and weekend community rides that show how many people cycle regularly.

× Yes, I didn't buy.

✓ No, I didn't have one.

The student attempted to answer a question about possession in the past but used the verb 'buy' incorrectly and formed a response that is unnatural and ungrammatical. The correct response uses the past tense auxiliary 'didn't' with the base verb 'have' to indicate lack of possession: 'I didn't have one.' Suggestion: use 'have' to express possession in past tense and pair 'didn't' with the base verb (didn't + have).

× Yes, you do think the bags are very popular in our country, especially that kids nowadays have bikes.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are very popular in our country, especially because kids nowadays have them.

The student used the wrong pronoun 'you' instead of 'I', and wrote 'the bags' which seems unrelated; also 'especially that' is incorrect connector. Corrections: use the correct subject pronoun 'I' for personal opinion, refer to 'bikes' consistently (not 'bags'), and use 'because' to give a reason. Use 'them' to avoid repetition of 'bikes.' Suggestion: say 'I think' for personal opinion, use consistent nouns, and use 'because' or 'since' to introduce reasons.

× I see them on the street riding bikes and there's even this Facebook group where all the bikers in the Philippines.

✓ I see them riding bikes on the street, and there's even a Facebook group for bikers in the Philippines.

The original sentence is awkwardly ordered and missing a preposition or connector: 'see them on the street riding bikes' is understandable but better as 'see them riding bikes on the street.' Also 'where all the bikers in the Philippines' is incomplete; it needs a preposition or relative clause completing its function. Correction reorganizes word order and completes the second clause: 'a Facebook group for bikers in the Philippines.' Suggestion: order action after the object ('see them doing something') and complete noun phrases with appropriate prepositions ('group for bikers').