Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clearer and more grammatically correct. Start with a direct topic sentence (e.g., “Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.”), then add 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid unclear words (e.g., “maldega”) and correct verb forms (use past tense: “I used to pedal”). Keep it under five sentences and finish the thought (don’t trail off).

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a non-electric bicycle that I used to pedal every day, and riding it helped improve my fitness. For example, I would cycle to school and play with friends, which made me stronger and more active.

提案: Make a clear main statement and support it with specific reasons and examples. Use correct grammar and linking words (e.g., “Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because…”). Avoid numeric confusion (e.g., “24 Wheelers”) and finish your example. Keep answers concise (max 5 sentences).

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are affordable and convenient. For instance, many people prefer two-wheelers to commute to work or run errands, especially in crowded cities. Additionally, they are cheaper to maintain than cars, which makes them a practical choice for many families.

× Yes I have my motorbike it is non electrical one but I have used to pedal my bike by using maldega just it is an physical oriented bike it will improve my physic by paddling and also it make me a.

✓ Yes, I have a motorbike. It is not electric, but I used to pedal a bike using maldega. It is a physically oriented bike; it improves my physique when I pedal and also it makes me fit.

Errors and reasons: incorrect present tense and verb forms (mix of present 'have' and incorrect 'have used to'); article errors ('my motorbike' should be 'a motorbike' when introducing it), word choice/spelling ('non electrical' -> 'not electric'; 'physic' -> 'physique'), subject-verb agreement ('it make' -> 'it makes'), and sentence structure (run-on sentence). Suggestions: split into shorter sentences; use 'used to' for past habitual actions without 'have' (e.g., 'I used to pedal a bike'); use correct articles ('a motorbike'); ensure subject-verb agreement in present simple ('it makes'); choose correct adjective forms ('physically oriented' and 'physique').

× As in my country the people are quite lot use of bike by using normal 2 Wheeler 24 Wheelers.

✓ In my country, many people use ordinary two-wheelers.

Errors and reasons: incorrect plural phrases and word order ('quite lot use of bike' is ungrammatical); numeral expression errors ('2 Wheeler 24 Wheelers' unclear). Suggestions: use 'many people' for quantity, 'use' as main verb, and 'two-wheelers' as the correct plural noun. Keep numbers consistent: 'two-wheelers' rather than mixing numerals and words.

× Especially the bikes 2 Wheelers are more like for example people are using the bike for going to work or.

✓ For example, people often use motorcycles or scooters to go to work.

Errors and reasons: poor sentence structure and redundancy ('bikes 2 Wheelers are more like' is ungrammatical), incorrect fragment ending with 'or.' Suggestions: restructure sentence to a clear example, use 'for example' at the start and state the activity ('use ... to go to work'), and choose correct nouns ('motorcycles or scooters' or 'bikes') and adverbs ('often').