Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and use correct tense. Start with a clear topic sentence that answers the question, then add one or two brief supporting details (e.g., when you got the bike, who gave it to you, or how you used it). Use past tense for childhood. Avoid filler sounds like “uh.”

例: Yes, I did. I got my first bike when I was seven — it was a small red bicycle my parents bought for my birthday. I rode it almost every day to visit friends and practice riding without training wheels.

提案: Answer directly, then give a specific reason or example and use linking words for coherence. Avoid repetitive fillers and vague phrases like “always” without context. Use plural agreement and smoother phrasing (e.g., “I often see people cycling”).

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. For example, many people use bicycles for short commutes and shopping because they are cheap and convenient. Consequently, I often see groups of cyclists and bike lanes crowded during weekends.

× Uh, yes, I have.

✓ Uh, yes, I did.

The examiner asked about possession in childhood (past time). The student used present perfect 'I have', which is inappropriate for a finished past situation. Use simple past 'I did' to indicate past possession. Suggestion: answer past questions with past tense verbs (e.g., 'Yes, I did' or 'Yes, I had a bike').

× Uh, yes, bikes are very popular in my country.

✓ Uh, yes, bicycles are very popular in my country.

This sentence is mostly acceptable, but 'bikes' is informal; for clarity in a test use 'bicycles'. No grammatical error affecting meaning. Suggestion: prefer 'bicycles' in formal contexts.

× Uh, also always when I go outside with my family, I see a person ride a bike.

✓ Also, whenever I go out with my family, I always see someone riding a bike.

Multiple issues: adverb placement ('always' is awkwardly placed), word choice ('go outside' better as 'go out'), and verb form/structure for the observation. Use 'whenever' for repeated occasions and 'always' before the verb phrase. 'A person' is unnatural in this context; 'someone' is better. Use the present participle 'riding' after 'see' when describing an ongoing action. Suggestion: reorder adverbs and use 'see someone riding' to describe habitual observations.