Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Reduce hesitation and repetition, give a clear topic sentence then one or two concise supporting details. Use linking words (because, so, therefore) correctly and avoid filler sounds (uh, umm). Also watch grammar: use 'didn't have' not 'didn't used to have.' Keep answer within 2–4 sentences.

例: Yes. I had a bike and I rode it almost every day because we didn’t have mobile phones or many indoor entertainments. As a result, cycling was my main pastime and helped me explore my neighborhood and stay active.

提案: Provide a direct opinion first, then give specific reasons using clear linking words (because, for example, also). Avoid vague or unfinished sentences and filler words. Give one concrete example or statistic if possible. Keep to 2–4 sentences and check sentence structure (e.g., 'biking is popular because…').

例: Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular in my country because many people use them for commuting and exercise. For example, city bike lanes and weekend cycling clubs have grown recently, so more people cycle for both transport and sport.

× it was the only the activity that I did in my childhood because I didn't used to have a phone or, uh, something connected with technology.

✓ it was the only activity that I did in my childhood because I didn't use to have a phone or anything connected with technology.

The phrase 'didn't used to' is incorrect because after 'did' the base form of the verb should be used; 'used' becomes the base form 'use'. Use 'didn't use to' (or more commonly 'didn't use to') to talk about past habits that did not occur. Also remove the duplicated 'the' and replace 'something' with 'anything' for negative context. Suggestion: say 'I didn't use to have a phone or anything connected with technology.'

× I didn't used to have a phone or, uh, something connected with technology.

✓ I didn't use to have a phone or anything connected with technology.

Same error as above: after auxiliary 'did' the main verb must be in base form, not past form. 'Used' should be 'use'. In negative contexts 'anything' is more natural than 'something'. Suggestion: 'I didn't use to have a phone or anything connected with technology.'

× So I.

✓ So I didn't have many other activities.

The fragment 'So I.' is incomplete and lacks a verb and object. It appears the speaker intended to conclude that they had no other activities. Rewrite as a full sentence with subject and verb to complete the thought. Suggestion: 'So I didn't have many other activities.'

× Uh, I think so, yeah, because, umm, it's not only activity like, uh, if you are born within the, you can ride a bike, No, uh, you can also ride a bike if, uh, you want to do some sports, uh, because it's a kind of a sport as well.

✓ Uh, I think so, yeah, because it's not the only activity: if you are old enough, you can ride a bike. You can also ride a bike if you want to do some sport, because cycling is a kind of sport as well.

This long sentence has multiple issues: incomplete phrases ('it's not only activity'), incorrect or unclear clause ('if you are born within the'), and repetition. The corrected version provides clear sentence structure, fixes word choice ('the only activity', 'old enough', 'some sport'), and replaces 'it's a kind of a sport' with 'cycling is a kind of sport' for clarity and grammatical correctness. Suggestion: 'It's not the only activity: if you are old enough, you can ride a bike. You can also ride a bike if you want to do some sport, because cycling is a kind of sport as well.'

× Umm, and, uh, bicycle, uh, in my country we have a.

✓ Umm, and in my country we have many bicycles.

The fragment 'and, uh, bicycle, uh, in my country we have a.' is ungrammatical and missing nouns and articles. 'Bicycle' here needs an article or plural form. If referring generally, use plural 'bicycles' or 'the bicycle' with context. The corrected sentence uses 'many bicycles' to express availability. Suggestion: 'In my country we have many bicycles.'