Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar, add a clear topic sentence and one supporting detail. Use correct past tense and article, and keep it natural and concise (max 5 sentences). For example, say you didn’t have one and give a reason or brief consequence. Use linking words like "because" or "so".

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because my family couldn’t afford one. As a result, I usually walked to school or took the bus, which made me quite independent from an early age.

提案: Give a direct opinion, correct grammar, and provide specific supporting details with linking words. Avoid repetition and vague phrases. Mention who uses bikes, where they are popular, or reasons for popularity (health, traffic, culture).

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country because many people use them for short trips and commuting in crowded cities. For example, students and office workers often ride bikes to avoid traffic and save money on transport.

× I didn't have a bike when I was child.

✓ I didn't have a bike when I was a child.

Missing the singular count noun's article before 'child'. Use the indefinite article 'a' with singular countable nouns. Suggestion: include 'a' before 'child' to form 'a child'.

× I think the bike is popular our country because our a bike is is famous in our country.

✓ I think bikes are popular in our country because bicycles are well known here.

Multiple article and wording errors: 'the bike is popular our country' misses the preposition 'in' and uses 'the' incorrectly; 'our a bike is is famous' has wrong article order and a duplicated 'is'. Replace 'the bike' with plural 'bikes' to talk generally, add preposition 'in', and avoid redundant articles. Also 'famous in our country' is better phrased as 'well known here'. Suggestion: use plural for general statements ('bikes are popular'), include necessary prepositions ('in our country'), and avoid double verbs or misplaced articles.