Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar, tense and natural phrasing; give a concise direct answer then add one brief supporting detail. Use past simple (I didn’t have) and limit to up to 5 sentences. Add a linking word if you provide extra info (e.g., because, although).

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. I usually walked to school because my family couldn’t afford one. However, I sometimes rode a neighbor’s bike for fun at weekends.

提案: Make the answer more natural and specific: start with a clear topic sentence, then add supporting details with linking words (for example, because, especially). Avoid filler words (like, uh) and redundant words (bike cycle). Mention who uses bikes and for what reasons with specific examples. Keep within five sentences.

例: Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country because they are cheap and convenient. For example, many people use them to commute to work or go to the market. They are especially common among men and delivery workers, although more women and students are cycling now as well.

× No, I never have a bike in my childhood.

✓ No, I never had a bike in my childhood.

The sentence describes a past time period ('in my childhood'), so the verb should be in the past tense. 'Have' is present tense; use the past simple 'had'. Also consider using 'when I was a child' for a more natural phrasing. Suggestion: Use past simple for actions or states in a finished past period (e.g., 'I never had a bike when I was a child.').

× Yes, the bike cycle is really popular in my country and many people use that to reach from like, uh, from one location to another.

✓ Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country, and many people use them to travel from one place to another.

Several issues: 'the bike cycle' is awkward and uncountable; use the plural noun 'bicycles'. 'Is really popular' is acceptable but 'are very popular' agrees with plural. 'Use that' improperly refers to plural; use 'them'. 'Reach from...to' is incorrect collocation; use 'travel from one place to another'. Remove filler words like 'like' and 'uh'. Suggestion: Use clear plural nouns and natural collocations (e.g., 'bicycles are popular', 'use them to travel').

× Usually men, uh, use bicycle.

✓ Usually men use bicycles.

'Use' is fine but 'bicycle' is singular while 'men' is plural; this causes a mismatch. Use the plural noun 'bicycles' to agree with the plural subject. Also remove filler 'uh'. Suggestion: Ensure noun number matches the subject (e.g., 'men use bicycles').