Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and concise: begin with a clear topic sentence that answers the question, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid filler words (umm, uh) and incorrect tense. Use past tense for childhood and say whether you could ride or owned a bike. Add a brief reason or memory to enrich the answer.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. I never learned to ride, so my parents didn’t buy one for me. Instead, I usually walked to school or used public transport, and I sometimes envied friends who could cycle.

提案: Start with a clear opinion, then give specific reasons and use cohesive linking words (however, because, although). Correct grammar (use plural/singular appropriately) and avoid vague phrases like "not well known." Mention differences between urban and rural areas with concrete examples or brief comparisons.

例: I don’t think bikes are very popular in my country because most people prefer cars or public transport. For example, in cities many commuters use the subway or buses for convenience, while in rural areas people often travel by motorbike or car due to longer distances and poor cycling infrastructure.

× Actually, I haven't learned the ability of riding a bike.

✓ Actually, I haven't learned how to ride a bike.

Use of 'learned' with a noun phrase 'the ability of riding a bike' is unnatural and 'riding' should be replaced by the infinitive phrase 'how to ride' or 'to ride'. This is a verb + to-infinitive structure after 'learn' when expressing acquiring a skill. Suggestion: use 'learn how to ride a bike' or 'learn to ride a bike'. Grammar problem type ID: 9

× Umm, so when I was a kid I didn't have a bike and uh, I'm not able to ride a bike.

✓ Umm, so when I was a kid I didn't have a bike and, uh, I wasn't able to ride a bike.

The sentence mixes past ('when I was a kid', 'didn't have') with present ('I'm not able'). The ability refers to the past, so the verb for ability should be in the past tense 'wasn't able'. Keep tense consistent. Use 'wasn't able to ride a bike' or 'couldn't ride a bike'. Grammar problem type ID: 5

× No I don't think because most of the people in my country commute via cars or public transportation such as bus station, buses and subway system.

✓ No, I don't think so, because most people in my country commute by car or by public transportation, such as buses and the subway.

Awkward structure and incorrect prepositions: 'commute via cars' is unnatural; use 'commute by car' or 'by public transportation'. 'Most of the people' is wordy; 'most people' is preferred. 'Bus station' is a place, not a mode; list 'buses' instead. Add article 'the' before 'subway' when referring to a system. Also include 'so' after 'I don't think' for completeness. Grammar problem type ID: 11

× Uh so bikes are not a well known among citizens and in a rural areas also people like to commute.

✓ Uh, so bikes are not well known among citizens, and in rural areas people also prefer to commute by other means.

Incorrect article use: 'a well known' is wrong because 'well known' is an adjective phrase modifying 'bikes'—no 'a' needed. 'In a rural areas' mixes singular article with plural noun; use 'in rural areas'. Also improve word order and clarity: 'people also prefer to commute by other means' clarifies intended meaning. Grammar problem type ID: 22