Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural, concise and consistent in tense. Start with a clear topic sentence about past possession, then add one or two specific supporting details (e.g., when you got it, who gave it to you, or a memory). Use past tense throughout and avoid repeating the same idea.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My parents bought it for my sixth birthday, and I used to ride it to the park every weekend. I remember learning to balance on the grass before trying the road, which made me feel very proud.

提案: Give a clearer reason and provide a specific example or brief comparison. Avoid repeating phrases and use linking words like 'because', 'for example', or 'as a result' to make your answer more coherent. Mention one factor (infrastructure, cost, traffic) rather than restating 'large population'.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are an affordable and convenient way to travel in crowded cities. For example, many people cycle to work to avoid traffic jams, and there are dedicated bike lanes in several major towns, which makes cycling practical.

× Yes, I have a bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike.

The examiner asked about having a bike 'when you were a child' (past time). The student used present tense 'have' which is inconsistent with the past context. Change to past tense 'had' to match the time frame. Suggestion: Use past tense for actions or states tied to a past period (e.g., 'When I was a child, I had a bike').

× I had a bike.

✓ I had a bike.

This sentence is already correct for the past context. It uses the past tense 'had' which matches the question 'when you were a child'. No change needed.

× Yes, bikes are very popular in our country because of the large population of our country.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in our country because our country has a large population.

The original sentence repeats 'of our country' and has awkward phrasing. Additionally, 'are very popular' is fine in present tense for a general statement, but the explanatory clause should be phrased clearly. Rewriting to 'because our country has a large population' uses correct present tense and natural word order. Suggestion: Avoid repetition and use concise clauses (e.g., 'because our country has a large population' or 'because there is a large population in our country').