Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clear and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, correct word choice, and limit to 3–4 sentences. Use linking words to connect reasons and give one specific detail. Avoid unrelated or incorrect words (e.g., 'psyche' and 'pie').

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. I wasn't very interested in cycling; instead I preferred role-playing and playing with my dollhouse. Also, my parents had limited money, so they bought toys rather than a bicycle for me.

提案: This answer is good: it starts with a clear topic sentence, includes specific supporting details and a personal example. To improve, add one linking phrase and a brief comparison or reason to make it slightly more cohesive and natural. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in the Philippines. I see them everywhere during the day because many people use them for commuting and delivery work. For example, my cousin cycles to his job every day, which shows how common cycling is for both transport and recreation.

× No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because I wasn't really interested in those psyche and I prepared activities like role-playing, playing with dollhouse and toys and my parents couldn't afford to buy us a pie.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because I wasn't really interested in bikes, and I preferred activities like role-playing and playing with a dollhouse and toys, and my parents couldn't afford to buy me a bike.

Multiple issues: incorrect word choice ('psyche' should be 'bikes'), sentence structure and parallelism (use consistent forms: 'role-playing and playing with a dollhouse and toys'), pronoun and reference error ('us a pie' is wrong: context requires 'me a bike'), and article/word choice ('a dollhouse' and 'a bike'). Suggest improving by using clear nouns, keeping parallel structure for listed activities, and ensuring pronouns match the subject; break long sentences into clearer clauses if necessary.

× I think bikes are really popular in my country, especially here in the Philippines.

✓ I think bicycles are really popular in my country, especially here in the Philippines.

Word choice and formality: 'bikes' is informal but not strictly incorrect; suggesting 'bicycles' is clearer. No major grammatical error, but using a more precise noun improves register. Ensure consistency with other sentences.

× I see them everywhere on the road during the day, and many people use them for commuting or for delivery work.

✓ I see them everywhere on the roads during the day, and many people use them for commuting or delivery work.

Minor issue: plural 'roads' is more idiomatic, and parallel structure prefers 'commuting or delivery work' without repeating 'for'. Maintain parallelism in coordinated phrases.

× I also have a relative who cycles regularly, which shows how common cycling is for both transport and recreation.

✓ I also have a relative who cycles regularly, which shows how common cycling is for both transportation and recreation.

No major pronoun issue; suggestion to use 'transportation' for clarity in formal English. Sentence is grammatically acceptable; this is a style suggestion rather than a strict grammatical correction.