Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct, grammatically correct, and avoid irrelevant or culturally sensitive remarks. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give a brief reason or context. Use correct tense and articles, and keep it within 1–3 sentences. For example, say you didn’t have a bike and explain why concisely.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. My family didn’t allow girls to ride bicycles where I grew up, so I learned to walk or use public transport instead.

提案: Avoid filler words (uh, um) and organize your reasons with linking words. Give specific reasons (e.g. cheap, convenient, traffic) and one brief example or result. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and use correct noun phrases and articles.

例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because they are affordable and convenient for short journeys. For example, many people use bicycles to go to work or the market to avoid heavy traffic and save money.

× No, being a girl, I'm not eligible to ride a bike, so I don't have bike at that time.

✓ No, because I was a girl, I wasn't allowed to ride a bike, so I didn't have a bike at that time.

Problems: incorrect use of participial phrase 'being a girl' to explain past situation and pronoun/verb tense inconsistencies. Also missing article before 'bike'. This fits 'Incorrect use of pronouns' (12) and article issues (22) and past tense (5), but per instruction we report the primary matched type 12. Suggestion: Use a clear subject and past tense for past situations (I was a girl / I wasn't allowed), include the indefinite article 'a' before 'bike', and avoid dangling participles by not starting with 'being a girl'. Note: corrected sentence uses past tense to match 'when you were a child'.

× Yes, uh, my answer will be yes, because in my country there are a lot of people who are having their own bikes, uh, because of, uh, the very large population in my country and uh, and though there are many, uh, food.

✓ Yes, my answer is yes, because in my country many people have their own bikes due to the very large population, although there is a lot of food scarcity.

Problems: awkward future phrasing 'my answer will be yes' when stating a current opinion and incorrect continuous form 'are having' for possession; also unclear last clause. This fits 'Present tense issue' (6). Suggestion: Use simple present 'my answer is' to state an opinion now, use simple present 'many people have' to express possession, and clarify the final idea (for example 'food scarcity' or remove if irrelevant).