Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid irrelevant phrases (e.g. “such a great question”) and correct basic vocabulary errors (bike vs bag). Use past tense consistently and reduce filler words (uh).

例: Yes, I did. I had a red bicycle that I rode almost every weekend with my father. We used to cycle to the park and sometimes on quiet country roads, which helped me build confidence and a love for riding.

提案: Give a clear opinion first, then support it with one or two specific reasons using linking words (because, for example, so). Avoid vague or repetitive statements and remove fillers. Use correct vocabulary and complete sentences.

例: Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular in my country because many people use them for short commutes and exercise. For example, cities have dedicated bike lanes and several bike-sharing schemes, so cycling is convenient and affordable for lots of residents.

× 'Such a great question, thank you. Yes I do have a bag as a child and a fun fact, one of my hobbies was cycling so I do often ride my uh bike when I was a child with my father.'

✓ 'Such a great question, thank you. Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. A fun fact is that one of my hobbies was cycling, so I often rode my bike with my father.'

'Errors: present tense forms (do have, do often ride) are incorrectly used to describe past situations. Why: when describing past habits or states, use past simple (had, rode). Suggestions: replace do have with had; replace do often ride with often rode. Also split run-on sentence for clarity and add commas.'

× 'Yes, I do really think that by is popular in my country.'

✓ 'Yes, I really think that bicycles are popular in my country.'

'Errors: incorrect word 'by' and singular/plural mismatch. Why: the intended noun is bicycles (plural) when speaking generally. Suggestions: use the correct noun "bicycles" and plural form to express general popularity.'

× 'One of the reason is my country.'

✓ 'One of the reasons is that they are widely used in my country.'

'Errors: ungrammatical structure and missing information. Why: "One of the reason" is incorrect; use plural "reasons" and include a clear clause after "is that". Suggestions: restructure sentence to "One of the reasons is that..." and complete the idea.'

× 'Umm frequently help.'

✓ 'They are frequently used.'

'Errors: incomplete phrase and incorrect verb usage. Why: "help" is unrelated; likely intended to say bicycles help with transport or are frequently used. Suggestions: state a full clause using correct verb and preposition, for example "They are frequently used for short trips" or "They frequently help people travel short distances." '},{