Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ нужно сделать более естественным и грамматически правильным, сократить повторения и убрать лишние слова. Начните с прямого ответа на вопрос, затем добавьте одну-две конкретные детали и используйте связки. Также исправьте времена и артикли (например: "I had a bike" вместо "I did or have a bike").

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I got it when I was six, and my parents taught me how to ride it in the park near our house. Thanks to their help, I can still ride a bike confidently today.

提案: Старайтесь избегать звуков-заполнителей («uh», «um») и сделать речь более связной: дать прямой ответ, привести одну-две конкретные причины или пример и связать идеи при помощи союзов. Используйте точные формулировки (например, "not as popular as in other countries"), и не повторяйте фразы.

例: I don't think cycling is very popular in my country. Many people are busy and prefer driving or using public transport, so cycling is mostly for sport rather than daily travel. However, when I lived in China, I noticed many people rode bikes for short trips, which I found very convenient.

× When I was a child, I actually did or have a bike.

✓ When I was a child, I actually had a bike.

The sentence incorrectly mixes past auxiliary 'did' with present 'have'. Use the simple past 'had' to describe possession in the past. Suggestion: use 'had' for past possession and avoid adding 'did' unless forming a question or negative (e.g., 'Did you have...?' or 'I did not have...').

× I was at the age of 6 years old and I it was my mom and my dad.

✓ I was six years old, and it was my mom and dad who taught me.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and has extraneous words ('at the age of' plus 'years old' is redundant; 'I it was my mom and my dad' is malformed). Use a clear structure: 'I was six years old' (no 'at' required) and 'it was my mom and dad who taught me' or 'my mom and dad taught me.' Suggestion: avoid redundancy and ensure subject and verb agree and order is logical.

× They actually taught me how to ride it and thanks to them I am capable of doing it at this moment.

✓ They taught me how to ride it, and thanks to them I can still do it now.

The clause 'I am capable of doing it at this moment' is awkward for ability; use 'can' for general ability in present. Also keep past simple for 'taught'. Use 'still' to indicate continuity from past to present. Suggestion: use 'can' for present ability and prefer 'now' instead of 'at this moment' for natural speech.

× Actually, I think that uh, riding bikes isn't uh, as popular as it should be in my country because, uh, many people don't have a lot of spare time to devote to this physical activity.

✓ Actually, I think that riding bikes isn't as popular as it should be in my country because many people don't have much spare time to devote to this physical activity.

The sentence is mostly correct but contains filler 'uh' and the quantifier 'a lot of' is less appropriate with uncountable 'spare time'—use 'much' or 'a lot of' can be used conversationally but 'much' is more formal. Suggestion: remove filler words for clarity and use 'much' with uncountable nouns in negative contexts.

× However, as far as I have already seen as uh, I have lived in China, it's really popular and I uh, enjoy this process also.

✓ However, from what I've seen while I lived in China, cycling was really popular, and I enjoyed it too.

The original mixes present perfect 'I have already seen' awkwardly with 'I have lived in China' and present 'it's really popular' which creates tense inconsistency. If the speaker lived in China in the past, use past simple 'I lived' and 'was really popular' and past 'enjoyed' to match. Alternatively, if still living, use present perfect consistently. Suggestion: choose a consistent timeframe and align verbs (past simple for past residency and observations; present perfect for past experiences with present relevance).