Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar and sentence structure: use past tense consistently and reduce redundancy. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words (e.g., "so", "because", "and"). Keep answers concise (max 4–5 sentences). Focus on specific details like the bike's features, how you learned, and feelings at the time.

例: Yes. I didn’t have my own bike, but my brother owned a small blue bike that fit me well. My father taught me to ride it when I was seven, so I learned quickly and felt very excited and proud afterwards.

提案: Reduce hesitation and vague phrases; use clear, specific reasons and link them logically. Begin with a direct answer, then give two specific reasons using linking words (e.g., "because", "for example", "also"). Avoid filler words and incorrect verb forms (use "go to work/school"). Mention examples or statistics if possible to be more concrete.

例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because many children dream of owning one and often ride them to playgrounds. Also, many adults use bicycles for short commutes to work or school, especially in crowded cities where biking is faster and cheaper.

× When I was a child, I don't have some kind of bikes but my brother had a blue bike.

✓ When I was a child, I didn't have any kind of bike but my brother had a blue bike.

The sentence refers to a past time ('When I was a child') so the verb must be in the past tense: 'don't have' is present and incorrect. Use past negative 'didn't have'. Additionally 'some kind of bikes' is ungrammatical here; use 'any kind of bike' (singular) when talking about possession in general in a negative sentence. Suggestion: use past simple for past situations and 'any' in negative contexts.

× This bike was from my size and it was a very exciting to cycle this.

✓ This bike was my size and it was very exciting to cycle.

The phrase 'from my size' is incorrect; say 'my size' or 'the right size for me'. Also 'a very exciting' is wrong because 'exciting' is an adjective modifying a noun; here the clause requires an adjective phrase 'very exciting' without the indefinite article. Suggestion: remove 'a' and streamline to 'my size' or 'the right size for me'.

× My father teach me to cycle it and at that time was very exciting times for me.

✓ My father taught me to ride it, and that was a very exciting time for me.

The action happened in the past so use past tense 'taught' instead of 'teach'. 'To cycle it' is awkward; 'to ride it' or 'to ride the bike' is natural. The clause 'at that time was very exciting times for me' is ungrammatical and redundant: use 'that was a very exciting time for me' (singular 'time'). Suggestion: use past simple for past events, correct verb form, and simplify the time expression.

× Yes, absolutely bikes are popular in my country because every child uh dreams and they have a world to have their own bikes and cycle them into their playground and umm umm,

✓ Yes, absolutely. Bikes are popular in my country because every child dreams of having their own bike and riding it in the playground,

Start a new sentence or use a pause; 'every child uh dreams and they have a world to have their own bikes' is ungrammatical. Use 'dreams of having' to express desire, and maintain number agreement: 'their own bike' (singular) or 'their own bikes' consistently. 'Cycle them into their playground' should be 'ride it in the playground' or 'ride them in playgrounds'. Suggestion: use correct verb pattern 'dream of doing' and maintain consistent singular/plural.

× also a lot of people use that kind of bikes uh, to went their job and to school.

✓ also a lot of people use those kinds of bikes to go to work and to school.

'That kind of bikes' is incorrect: use 'those kinds of bikes' or 'that kind of bike'. 'To went' is wrong because 'went' is past; after 'use' the infinitive 'to go' is needed. 'Their job' is unnatural; use 'work'. Suggestion: match demonstrative and number ('those kinds' with plural), use infinitive 'to go', and use 'work' for commuting context.