Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear, relevant and provides a personal example, which is good. To improve, make the response more concise and natural by starting with a straightforward topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid filler words like “well” and redundant phrasing. Also vary sentence structures slightly to sound more fluent.

例: Yes, I did. It was a small red bike with training wheels, and I often rode it around the park near my house. Every Saturday my friends and I would cycle to the playground and spend a couple of hours there, playing and racing each other.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but has grammatical errors, repetition, and unclear phrasing. Improve by giving a clear topic sentence, then support it with specific reasons and an example. Use linking words (for example, because, so) to make your explanation coherent, and correct verb forms and word order.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are convenient for short trips and help people avoid traffic. For example, many delivery workers and students use bicycles to get around the city quickly and cheaply.

× Well, yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

✓ Well, yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

No correction needed; sentence correctly uses past tense to describe a past state.

× It was a small bike with the training wheels and I used to ride around the park with my friends.

✓ It was a small bike with training wheels and I used to ride around the park with my friends.

Remove the definite article 'the' before 'training wheels' because the phrase refers to a general feature, not specific wheels already known to the listener. Suggestion: use 'training wheels' without 'the' when describing a typical attribute.

× For example, every Saturday we would cycle to the playground and spend a few hours there.

✓ For example, every Saturday we would cycle to the playground and spend a few hours there.

No correction needed; sentence correctly uses habitual past with 'would' to describe repeated past actions.

× Well, I think bikes are very very popular in our country.

✓ Well, I think bikes are very, very popular in our country.

Mainly punctuation: add a comma between repeated adverb 'very, very' for clarity. Tense and agreement are correct.

× It is used for short trips people are used for to avoid traffic.

✓ They are used for short trips; people often use them to avoid traffic.

Original sentence has pronoun and word-order errors. 'Bikes' is plural so use 'they' not 'it'. Also restructure to separate clauses: 'They are used for short trips' and 'people often use them to avoid traffic.' This fixes pronoun agreement and clarifies intended meaning.

× I see some delivery workers used by.

✓ I see some delivery workers using them.

The original phrase 'used by' is ungrammatical here. To express that delivery workers use bikes, use the present participle 'using' and the object 'them' (referring to bikes): 'delivery workers using them.' This maintains present simple observation and correct verb form.