Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer grammatically correct, concise, and add one brief detail. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct tense and pronoun use, and optionally give a short reason or feeling. Use linking words if you add details.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, but it was stolen when I was about ten. I felt very upset because I used it to ride to my friend’s house every day.

提案: Give a clear direct response, correct grammar and pronunciation errors (e.g. 'back' → 'bike'), and provide specific supporting details using linking words. Limit to about 2–4 sentences and avoid repetition.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. In many families both children and adults own bikes, and people often use them for short trips or exercise, especially in smaller towns.

× Yes, but it's be stolen when I was a child.

✓ Yes, but it was stolen when I was a child.

The error is using 'be' instead of the correct past participle or past form. The passive construction for a past event requires 'was' + past participle (stolen). 'It's be stolen' mixes present contraction 'it's' and base verb 'be', which is incorrect. Use 'it was stolen' to indicate a completed action in the past. Suggestion: use simple past passive for events that happened to the subject in the past (was/were + past participle).

× Absolutely yes by every every family has a back, maybe their adults rights or their children rights, but bike is a really common sense in our country.

✓ Absolutely. Almost every family has a bike, either for the adults or for the children, and bikes are very common in our country.

Multiple sentence structure and word choice errors: 'by every every family has a back' is ungrammatical and likely intended as 'almost every family has a bike'. Repetition 'every every' is incorrect. 'their adults rights or their children rights' is incorrect pronoun and noun choices; the intended meaning is 'for the adults or for the children'. 'but bike is a really common sense' is incorrect: 'bike' needs an article or plural 'bikes', 'common sense' is the wrong collocation. Also subject-verb agreement: 'bikes are' rather than 'bike is' when speaking generally. Suggestion: break into clear clauses, use 'almost every', use 'has a bike' (singular per family) or 'bikes are common' and correct plural agreement.