Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 答えは内容が分かるが、文法や表現の誤り、冗長さ、つなぎの語の不足が見られます。具体的には時制ミス（“hadn't ridden”は不適切）や関係代名詞の使い方（“which is pink and white”は不自然）を直す必要があります。また、話を論理的に繋ぐために接続詞を使い、センテンス数を抑えて明確に述べる練習をしてください。例：最初にテーマ文、続けて詳細（色、補助輪、今の状況）の順で1〜3文にまとめると良いです。

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My parents bought it for me when I was three; it was pink and white and had training wheels at first. Now I can ride a bicycle without them.

提案: 内容は伝わるが、表現がやや繰り返しで不正確な語順や語選びがある（“ride a bus school”は誤り）。また、意見を明確にするために比較表現や具体例を一つか二つ加えると説得力が増します。接続語で論理を整え、文を短くまとめてください。例えば最初に結論を言い、その後に理由と具体例を続ける構成が良いです。

例: Yes, bicycles are fairly common in my country, but cars and public transport are more widely used. For example, many people commute by bus or car in cities, although I still see cyclists, especially near parks and schools.

× Umm, I hadn't ridden a bike since three years old and my parents bought me, which is pink and white.

✓ Umm, I hadn't ridden a bike since I was three years old and my parents bought me one, which is pink and white.

The phrase 'since three years old' is incorrect for referring to an age; use 'since I was three years old' to show the starting point in time. Also 'bought me' needs an object; add 'one' to refer to the bike. Keep past perfect 'hadn't ridden' only if referring to a time before another past event; consider using simple past if not comparing two past times.

× And at that time, at first there were some supporting wheels, and now I can ride a bike.

✓ At that time, at first there were some training wheels, and now I can ride a bike.

The phrase 'supporting wheels' is understandable but 'training wheels' is the natural collocation in English. No preposition error in structure, but word choice corrected. Sentence is otherwise acceptable.

× Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country, but I think car and some public transportation are more popular.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country, but I think cars and some public transportation are more popular.

The noun 'car' should be plural 'cars' to match the general statement about a category. Use plural when speaking about cars in general.

× But yeah, I usually ride a bus school and I saw somebody riding a bike so it is not uncommon.

✓ But yeah, I usually take a school bus, and I see somebody riding a bike, so it is not uncommon.

'Ride a bus school' is incorrect word order and collocation; use 'take a school bus'. The tense 'saw' conflicts with the general present statement; use present simple 'see' when stating habitual observations. Add commas for clarity.