Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Give a fuller, natural response: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two brief supporting details (reason, memory or comparison). Keep it under five sentences and avoid single-word replies.

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. My family couldn't afford one, so I usually walked to school or took the bus. I sometimes borrowed a neighbour's bike at weekends, which felt exciting because it was rare for me to ride.

提案: Organise your answer with a clear opinion, then give specific reasons and use linking words (for example, 'because', 'however', 'for example'). Avoid repetition and unclear phrases. Use correct nouns (e.g. 'bikes') and complete explanations about why they are or are not popular.

例: I don't think bikes are very popular in my country. This is mainly because public transport is cheap and convenient, so most people prefer buses or cars. For example, in my city there are few bike lanes, which makes cycling less safe and attractive.

× I think the bags are not popular. Bikes are not popular in my country because because the people are.

✓ I think bikes are not popular. Bikes are not popular in my country because of the people.

The student wrote 'the bags' which seems to be a wrong pronoun/noun choice; it should be 'bikes' to refer to the same subject (incorrect use of pronouns/nouns). Also the phrase 'because because the people are' is ungrammatical: it repeats 'because' and omits a preposition and a complement. Replacing with 'because of the people' provides the required preposition and noun phrase to explain the reason. Suggestion: keep the subject consistent ('bikes') and use 'because of' + noun phrase or 'because' + clause (e.g., 'because people prefer cars') to state a clear reason.