Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is understandable but unclear and grammatically incorrect in places. Give a direct topic sentence, then one or two supporting details. Use clear phrases to describe the bike and one brief memory or reason why it was special. Keep it within 2–4 sentences and avoid confusing words like "probe" here.

例: Yes, I had a big red bike when I was a child. It had wide tires and a comfortable seat, which made it easy to ride around the neighborhood. I remember finding a small toy stuck under the seat after months of using it, which made the bike feel even more memorable.

提案: Your response answers the question but has grammar and word choice problems. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add two specific supporting points using linking words (for example, "for transport" and "for exercise"). Correct plural and verb forms, and keep sentences concise and logical.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. For example, many children learn to ride bikes in parks or on quiet streets, and adults often cycle for exercise or short daily commutes. As a result, cycling is both a common pastime and a practical way to travel.

× When I was a child I had a big bike with the bike probe found after months of using it.

✓ When I was a child, I had a big bike that I found the pump for after months of using it.

The original sentence has unclear phrase 'the bike probe found' and incorrect structure. This is a sentence structure error because the intended meaning (finding the pump/probe later) is not clearly connected to the bike. I corrected the clause to 'that I found the pump for after months of using it' to show the relationship between the bike and the item found later. Suggestion: identify the object you mean (pump/probe) and use a relative clause ('that' or 'which') or reorder the sentence to make the timeline clear. Also add a comma after the introductory time phrase 'When I was a child.'

× Yes, bikes are popular in our country. Many child uses uses it to learn how to ride a bike and when you get older you do bike to for a hobby or like for exercising.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in our country. Many children use them to learn how to ride a bike, and when you get older you ride a bike as a hobby or for exercise.

The original contains singular/plural mismatch and repeated word 'uses uses'. 'Many child' should be plural 'Many children' and the verb must agree: 'use' not 'uses'. 'It' is incorrect for plural 'children' so use 'them'. Also awkward phrases 'do bike to for a hobby' and 'like for exercising' were corrected to 'ride a bike as a hobby or for exercise' to fit natural English. Suggestion: match plural subjects with plural verbs, avoid repeating words, and use appropriate verbs (ride) and noun forms (exercise).