Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and grammatical: answer directly with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid filler sounds (umm) and incorrect passive phrasing ("I was bought it"). Use linking words (e.g., "because" or "so") and keep it to 2–3 concise sentences.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My mother bought it for me so I could learn to ride, and I used it every day to go to the park near our house.

提案: Start with a direct opinion, then give specific reasons or examples using linking words. Remove hesitations and vague phrases ("for sure"). Mention concrete groups or situations that use bikes to make the answer more precise.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because many people use them for short commutes. For example, students and office workers often cycle to school or work to avoid traffic and save money.

× Umm yes, I did have a bike when I was younger because I was bought it.

✓ Umm yes, I did have a bike when I was younger because it was bought for me.

The sentence uses a passive idea incorrectly. 'I was bought it' is ungrammatical because a person cannot be the direct object of 'buy' in that structure. Use passive with the thing as the subject: 'it was bought for me.' Also, keep past tense consistent: 'did have' is acceptable in spoken emphasis, and 'was bought' matches past tense. Suggestion: Use 'it was bought for me' or an active form 'my mom bought it for me.'

× It was bought by my mom for me to learn how to ride it.

✓ My mom bought it for me so I could learn how to ride it.

The original phrase 'for me to learn' is awkward here. Use a clearer purpose construction: 'so I could learn' or 'to help me learn.' Also, in spoken English, an active form ('My mom bought it') is more natural than passive. This keeps tense and meaning clear. Suggestion: Use 'My mom bought it for me so I could learn how to ride it.'

× Well, I think it's a relatively popular vehicle in my country for sure because, uh, it is used by many commuters, especially students, umm, like me.

✓ Well, I think it's a relatively popular vehicle in my country, because it is used by many commuters, especially students like me.

The sentence is mostly correct, but contains unnecessary fillers and a slight punctuation problem. Remove redundant 'for sure' and filler 'uh, umm' for clarity. Keep present simple 'is used' to describe general facts. Also remove the comma before 'like me' to make the phrase flow naturally. Suggestion: Say 'Well, I think it's a relatively popular vehicle in my country because it is used by many commuters, especially students like me.'