Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Reduce hesitation sounds (umm, uh) and produce one clear topic sentence. Keep answers concise (max 5 sentences). Improve coherence by giving a clear reason for not having a bike and one brief supporting detail using linking words (e.g., 'because' or 'so'). Use correct grammar (e.g., 'a bike' not 'any bike' in this context) and avoid irrelevant fragments.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. I only bought one when I was about 18, in college, because my family could not afford one when I was younger. As a result, I usually walked or took public transport to school.

提案: Start with a direct topic sentence and avoid fillers. Use linking words (e.g., 'because', 'also', 'however') to organize points. Provide specific supporting details or examples (e.g., bike lanes, numbers of cyclists, community events). Correct grammar: use plural/singular consistency ('bicycles are popular') and finish sentences fully.

例: Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular in my country. For example, many cities have dedicated bike lanes and regular weekend cycling events, so people use bikes both for commuting and for exercise. Additionally, affordable bike-sharing schemes in several towns have increased cycling among students and workers.

× I didn't have any bike when I was a child.

✓ I didn't have any bikes when I was a child.

Use the plural 'bikes' after 'any' for countable nouns in negative sentences. 'Any' + plural noun is required to indicate zero quantity; 'bike' (singular) is incorrect in this structure.

× I only had a bike when I was around umm, umm, college, I think around maybe 18 years old, umm, because when I was a child, having a bicycle, umm, when my family is praying, because we are.

✓ I only had a bike when I was around college, I think about 18 years old, because when I was a child my family were very religious.

The original sentence mixes tense and fragments and uses present 'is praying' incorrectly for past context. Use simple past 'had' and 'were' to describe past habitual states. Remove filler words and restructure into a single coherent past-tense sentence. Replace vague fragment 'having a bicycle, when my family is praying' with a clear past explanation: 'because my family were very religious.'

× based on my observations, umm bicycle is a popular medium of transportation isn't our country umm since is it?

✓ Based on my observations, bicycles are a popular means of transportation in our country, aren't they?

Use plural 'bicycles' when making a general statement about many items. Also 'means' is the correct noun for 'method/way' and 'aren't they' is the appropriate tag question matching the plural subject. Ensure subject-verb agreement and correct question tag formation.

× It umm has a purpose also of exercise aside from transportation and also biking communities in our.

✓ It also serves as exercise in addition to transportation, and there are biking communities in our country.

Preposition and sentence structure errors: 'purpose of exercise' is awkward — use 'serves as exercise' or 'is used for exercise.' 'Aside from' can be replaced with 'in addition to.' The fragment 'biking communities in our' lacks the object 'country' and a verb; add 'there are' and 'country' to complete the sentence.