Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly and use correct tense and a concise explanation. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then add one brief supporting detail (reason or memory) using a linking word. Keep it natural and within 2–3 sentences.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. I grew up in a small apartment and my parents preferred me to play in the communal garden, so they never bought one for me.

提案: Be more concise and correct the sentence structure. Start with a clear opinion, then give a specific reason or example linked with a linking word (for example, because, so, therefore). Avoid vague phrases and finish the sentence fully.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because many people use them for short commutes. For example, I often see commuters and students cycling home in the afternoons due to heavy traffic and convenient bike lanes.

× No, I don't have a bike when I was a child.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child.

The sentence describes a past situation ('when I was a child'), so the past simple tense is required. 'Don't have' is present tense; replace with past simple 'didn't have'. Also the auxiliary 'did' indicates past, so the main verb stays in base form 'have'. Suggestion: Use past simple for past time references: 'I didn't have a bike when I was a child.'

× Bikes are popular in my country because from what I have observed from a lot of people who ride bikes, especially during the afternoon to.

✓ Bikes are popular in my country because, from what I have observed, many people ride them, especially in the afternoon.

Multiple issues: the original mixes present simple 'are' with present perfect 'have observed' which is acceptable, but the phrase is wordy and includes redundant prepositions ('from what I have observed from a lot of people'). Use 'from what I have observed' or 'I have observed that' plus 'many people'. Also 'ride bikes' should use object pronoun 'them' to avoid repetition. The ending 'to' is incorrect and unnecessary; the correct preposition is 'in the afternoon' for time. Suggestions: simplify to 'from what I have observed, many people ride them, especially in the afternoon.'