Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ был недостаточно ясным и естественным. Нужно сразу дать чёткое утверждение, затем развить мысль с конкретными причинами и примерами, используя связки (for example, because, therefore). Избегайте слов-паразитов («uh») и бессодержательных фраз («especially in fact that»). Постарайтесь уложиться в 2–4 предложения, использовать подходящую лексику (commuting, congestion, environmentally friendly) и конкретные детали (в каких городах, кто чаще ездит на велосипедах).

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because many people use them to avoid traffic jams. For example, commuters in big cities often cycle to work since it’s faster than sitting in congested traffic. Additionally, cycling is popular among students and delivery workers because it’s cheap and convenient.

× Did you have a bike when you were a child?

✓ Yes, I did.

The student repeated the examiner's question word-for-word, which is unnecessary and sounds awkward. The appropriate response to a yes/no question in the past is 'Yes, I did' or 'No, I didn't.' Use a short answer that matches the auxiliary verb and tense of the question (past simple). Replace repetition with a concise answer and then add details if needed (e.g. 'Yes, I did. I had one when I was about eight.').

× I think yes, Especially in fact that, uh, traffic jams.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular, especially because of traffic jams.

The original sentence is fragmented and contains redundant phrases ('Especially in fact that') and filler ('uh'). The corrected sentence uses proper sentence structure: a main clause ('Yes, I think bikes are popular') and a subordinating phrase introduced by 'especially because' to explain the reason. Avoid redundant markers ('in fact that') and unnecessary fillers; use 'because' or 'due to' to link cause and effect. Ensure subject and verb agreement and maintain clear, concise phrasing.