Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Use correct past tense and natural phrasing; give a brief reason or memory to expand. Keep to under five sentences and use linking words if you add details. For example, say you didn’t have one and briefly explain why (family choice, cost, safety) to make the answer more informative and natural.

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my parents thought it was unsafe to ride on busy roads. However, I remember borrowing my friend’s bike sometimes, which was fun and helped me learn basic balance.

提案: Remove hesitations and small grammar errors; use linking words and more precise vocabulary. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific reasons or an example. Avoid redundancy like “cheap in prices.”

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my city because they are ideal for short trips and are affordable. Additionally, many streets and bike lanes make cycling convenient, so a lot of people choose bikes for commuting and running errands.

× No, I haven't any bike when I was a child.

✓ No, I didn't have any bike when I was a child.

The original sentence mixes present perfect negative 'haven't' with a past time expression 'when I was a child'. Use simple past 'didn't have' for completed past actions. Also, 'any bike' is acceptable but 'a bike' or 'any bikes' could be used; here 'any bike' is okay in negative but matching singular/plural with 'a' is clearer. Suggestion: Use simple past for actions tied to a specific past time: 'I didn't have a bike when I was a child.'

× Uh, quite popular in our city because they are good for short trip and they are uh, easily accessible and cheap in prices, so yeah.

✓ Uh, they are quite popular in our city because they are good for short trips, easily accessible, and cheap, so yeah.

The sentence has several present-tense and noun-number issues. 'Quite popular' needs a subject ('they'). 'Short trip' should be plural 'short trips' to match general statement. 'Cheap in prices' is awkward; use 'cheap' or 'inexpensive'. Also reduce redundancy: 'they are uh, easily accessible and cheap in prices' -> 'easily accessible and cheap'. Maintain parallel structure when listing adjectives: 'easily accessible and cheap'. Suggestion: Provide an explicit subject, pluralize countable nouns when speaking generally, and use concise adjective phrases: 'They are quite popular in our city because they are good for short trips, easily accessible, and cheap.'