Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答直接且正确，但过于简短。可以稍微扩展一句来展示更多语言能力，例如说明什么时候得到的、是否常骑或对你的意义。注意不要超过5句，保持自然连贯。

例: Yes, I did. I got my first bike when I was seven and rode it almost every day after school. It helped me learn balance and gave me a lot of freedom to explore my neighborhood.

提案: 答案有观点和理由，但表达不够自然，句子结构不够清晰，存在语法和用词问题（如“which loves sports”，“going circle”）。建议使用衔接词整理理由，提供更具体的例子或比较，并修正不自然的短语。保持不超过5句。

例: Yes, I do. Cycling is quite popular in China, especially as a weekend activity, because many people enjoy outdoor exercise. For example, my classmates often go for group rides around the park after school, and shared bike services in cities have also made cycling more convenient.

× Yes I do, because many people in China, which loves sports, often ride bikes in at the weekend and lots of my classmates like riding, like going circle after class.

✓ Yes I do, because many people in China, who love sports, often ride bikes at the weekend, and many of my classmates like riding, for example going in circles after class.

错误类型：介词和非限制性定语从句及表达搭配不当。 1) 原句中用法“which loves sports”不合适，因为先行词“people”指人，应使用关系代词“who”，不是“which”。 2) “in at the weekend”重复使用介词，正确应为“at the weekend”。 3) “lots of my classmates”可改为更正式的“many of my classmates”；并且短语“like going circle”中的“circle”名词形式使用不当，应为短语“go in circles”或“going in circles”。 改进建议： - 用“who”修饰人而不是“which”。 - 避免重复介词，常见时间短语为“at the weekend”。 - 使用惯用表达“go in circles”表示“绕圈子”，并注意保持并列结构一致（使用逗号或连接词）。 - 多读英文定语从句和固定搭配，有助于掌握合适的关系代词与介词的用法。