Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Perbaiki tata bahasa dasar dan struktur kalimat. Gunakan satu kalimat topik yang langsung menjawab pertanyaan, lalu maksudkan 1–2 kalimat pendukung yang jelas. Perhatikan bentuk masa lalu (had, taught), subjek-objek (my dad and I), dan hilangkan pengulangan. Juga jelaskan detail spesifik seperti usia saat belajar dan tempat latihan secara singkat.

例: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. It was pink because I liked bright colours, and my father taught me how to ride it every morning in our neighborhood when I was about seven. We both enjoyed those rides, and I practiced until I felt confident.

提案: Perbaiki tata bahasa, gunakan kalimat topik yang jelas, dan berikan dukungan dengan alasan dan contoh konkret. Perhatikan bentuk jamak dan tata kata (were/were not, children have), serta gunakan kata penghubung untuk kelancaran. Jelaskan pula perubahan waktu jika relevan (now vs when I was a child).

例: Yes, bicycles used to be very popular in my country when I was a child because almost every child owned one. For example, boys often had bikes in darker colours like blue or black, while girls usually rode brighter colours. However, nowadays more people prefer motorbikes for commuting.

× Yes, I did I have a bicycle when I was a child and my dad and me really love the bike.

✓ Yes, I did. I had a bicycle when I was a child and my dad and I really loved the bike.

Kalimat ini mengandung kesalahan penggunaan tense dan subjek. 'I did' sudah menunjukkan past tense sehingga klausa berikut harus menggunakan past tense: 'have' -> 'had', 'love' -> 'loved'. Selain itu, subjek gabungan harus menggunakan 'I' bukan 'me'. Saran: gunakan past tense konsisten untuk kejadian di masa lalu dan gunakan 'I' dalam subjek ('my dad and I').

× The color is pink because I'm girl every single morning jet teach me how to ride a bike in our neck in our house and.

✓ The color was pink because I was a girl. Every single morning my dad taught me how to ride a bike in our backyard.

Kalimat ini bermasalah pada tense, kata ganti, dan pemilihan kata. Karena berbicara tentang masa lalu, gunakan past tense: 'is' -> 'was'. 'I'm girl' salah bentuk; harus 'I was a girl' atau cukup 'I was young' tergantung konteks. 'jet' tampaknya salah eja untuk 'dad', dan 'teach' harus past tense 'taught'. 'in our neck in our house' tidak tepat; kemungkinan maksud 'in our yard' atau 'in our backyard'. Saran: ubah menjadi frasa yang jelas dan konsisten dalam past tense, perbaiki ejaan dan pilih kata tempat yang tepat.

× When I was child bike very famous in my country because every child have a bicycle and when a boy does have there are there has a bicycle the colour a different colour for men or boy, he has blue and black and for.

✓ When I was a child, bikes were very popular in my country because every child had a bicycle. Boys usually had bicycles in different colours, like blue or black.

Kalimat ini mengandung beberapa kesalahan tense, bentuk jamak, dan struktur. 'When I was child' harus 'When I was a child'. 'bike very famous' perlu bentuk predikat yang benar: 'bikes were very popular'. 'every child have' harus past tense dan subjek-verb agreement: 'every child had'. Frasa lain kacau: 'when a boy does have there are there has a bicycle' dipadatkan menjadi penjelasan sederhana tentang kebiasaan: 'Boys usually had bicycles in different colours'. Saran: pisahkan menjadi beberapa kalimat yang jelas, gunakan past tense konsisten, dan perbaiki agreement antara subjek dan kata kerja.