Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 문장 구조를 명확히 하고 불필요한 중복과 망설임(uh, so)을 줄이세요. 주제문으로 바로 답한 후(예: "Yes, I did") 세부 정보를 덧붙이되 한두 문장으로 간결하게 유지하세요. 색깔, 소유 기간, 감정이나 활동(예: 친구들과 타곤 했다)과 같은 구체적 세부사항을 연결어(then, also, and)로 자연스럽게 이어 말하세요.

例: Yes, I did. I had a small yellow bike when I was seven, and I loved riding it around my neighborhood. I often rode it with my friends after school, which made those summers really memorable.

提案: 의견을 명확한 주제문으로 시작하고 이유나 예시로 뒷받침하세요. 문장 연결어(if, because, for example)를 사용해 논리성을 높이고 발음이나 삐걱거림을 줄이도록 연습하세요. 또한 모호한 표현을 피하고 구체적인 근거(예: 자전거 도로의 수, 통근자 비율, 대중교통 요금 등)를 제시하세요.

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country because many people use them for short trips and commuting. For example, cities have been building more bike lanes recently, and you can see many people cycling to work or school during rush hour.

× Yes, I did. Uh, when I was a child. I loved uh. Uh bike I have uh, I had a yellow bike so I love.

✓ Yes, I did. When I was a child, I loved bicycles. I had a yellow bike, so I loved it.

The original contains fragmented sentences, pauses and incorrect tense consistency. Combine fragments into complete sentences and maintain past tense: 'loved' and 'had' for childhood. Replace 'uh bike I have' with 'I had a yellow bike' and add the pronoun 'it' after 'loved' for clarity. Suggestions: remove filler sounds, make full clauses, keep past tense for childhood descriptions. Grammar problem type ID:26

× Decide to I think my country is popular bikes uh. Tashu Tashu is stationed by.

✓ I think bicycles are popular in my country. There are many bicycle rental or parking stations.

The original is ungrammatical and jumbled. Reorder elements: subject 'I' + verb 'think' + clause 'bicycles are popular in my country.' For the second fragmented idea, clarify intended meaning; if referring to many stations, use 'There are many bicycle rental or parking stations.' Use 'bicycles' (plural) and correct 'is stationed by' to an active clear construction. Suggestions: state one idea per sentence, use correct subject-verb order, and choose appropriate vocabulary for 'stations'. Grammar problem type ID:26