Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Сформулируйте ответ более естественно и грамотно: укажите один чёткий возраст и добавьте короткую уточняющую деталь. Избегайте повтора числительных и небрежных конструкций. Также следите за правильным использованием грамматических форм (например, «when I was six»). Можно расширить ответ одной-двумя поддерживающими фразами (почему вы её запомнили или кто вам её подарил) с помощью связочных слов.

例: Yes, I did. I got my first bike when I was six. It was a bright red bicycle that my parents gave me for my birthday, and I rode it around the neighbourhood every afternoon.

提案: Отвечайте прямо и избегайте тавтологии. Начните с короткого утверждения, затем приведите конкретную причину или пример. Используйте связки (for example, because, especially) и уточняйте, о каких группах людей или ситуациях идёт речь. Следите за согласованием: «bikes are popular» — не повторяйте слова и не удваивайте прилагательные.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among young people. For example, many students cycle to school because it's cheap and convenient, and several cities have bike-sharing schemes that make cycling more common.

× I got my first bike when I was six or six years.

✓ I got my first bike when I was six.

The phrase 'six or six years' is incorrect; it mixes numeral and 'years'. Use either 'six' or 'six years' but not both. The concise and natural form is 'when I was six.' Use 'when I was six years old' if you want the longer form. Suggestion: say 'when I was six' or 'when I was six years old.'

× I think bikes are generally popular in every country, and of course in my country it's also popular especially among young, young people.

✓ I think bikes are generally popular in every country, and of course in my country they're also popular, especially among young people.

There is a pronoun and agreement issue: 'it's also popular' uses singular 'it' to refer to plural 'bikes', causing a mismatch. Replace with plural pronoun 'they're' or repeat the noun 'bikes'. Also remove the duplicated word 'young' and add a comma before 'especially' for clarity. Suggestion: use plural pronoun 'they' to agree with 'bikes' and avoid word repetition; say 'they're also popular, especially among young people.'