Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No and brief detail), then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect verb forms (use past tense for childhood). Keep to a maximum of 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I did. I learned to ride a bicycle by myself when I was about 14, and I used it to travel to school and nearby friends’ houses. Because I practiced every day, I became confident and enjoyed cycling around my neighborhood.

提案: Give a clear direct answer first, then support it with specific reasons and one short example. Use linking words (for example, because, therefore) and avoid irrelevant personal desires. Use accurate grammar and concise phrasing.

例: Yes, motorcycles are very popular in India because they are affordable and practical for crowded cities. For example, many families use two-wheelers for daily commuting and small businesses rely on them for deliveries, so they are seen everywhere.

× That was an interesting question.

✓ That is an interesting question.

The student answers immediately so present tense 'is' is more appropriate to indicate the question still seems interesting now. Use present simple to describe the current reaction to the question.

× I had a bike once and I love to drive and I learned by myself.

✓ I had a bike once, and I loved riding it; I learned by myself.

The sentence mixes past and present tenses. 'Had' is past, so 'love' should be changed to past 'loved' to maintain consistent past narration; use 'riding' (gerund) with 'loved' to sound natural. Also add punctuation to separate ideas.

× I was so happy about that.

✓ I was very happy about that.

'So' is informal and can be acceptable, but 'very' is more neutral in a test response. This is an improvement suggestion; grammatically 'so' is not wrong but 'very' fits register better.

× I go many places at my age, 14 years old, when I am, so I was so passionate about driving.

✓ When I was 14 years old, I went to many places, so I was very passionate about riding.

The sentence mixes present and past tenses and has awkward word order. Use past tense 'was' and 'went' because the student is describing past experiences. Place the time expression 'when I was 14 years old' at the start for clarity; use 'riding' instead of 'driving' for a bike.

× Yeah.

✓ Yes, I was.

A single interjection 'Yeah' is informal and provides little information. Expand to a short full response appropriate to the context. This is a stylistic improvement to make the answer clearer.

× As I'm living in India, the bikes are more affordable and we can see everywhere and it gives me the impression to buy a bike now.

✓ Since I live in India, bikes are more affordable and common, and that makes me want to buy a bike now.

Use simple present 'I live' rather than present continuous 'I'm living' for a general fact. 'We can see everywhere' is awkward; use 'are common'. 'It gives me the impression to buy' is incorrect collocation—use 'that makes me want to buy'.

× And I love BMW bikes and super bikes and of course it is popular in our country.

✓ I like BMW motorcycles and superbikes, and they are, of course, popular in our country.

Use 'like' instead of 'love' to match register; 'bikes' is repetitive—'motorcycles' is clearer. 'Super bikes' should be 'superbikes' as one word. 'It is popular' incorrectly references plural subjects; use 'they are' for plural agreement.