Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and clear: start with a concise topic sentence answering the question, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar (tense and articles) and avoid filler words. For example, say when you first learned and mention who taught you or why it took time. Keep to 2–4 sentences and use precise vocabulary.

例: I didn't have my own bike as a child. Instead, I often practised on my cousin's bicycle, but I struggled with balance and didn't learn to ride properly until I was 14, when a friend helped me and I finally gained confidence.

提案: Answer clearly with a topic sentence, then give specific reasons and examples using linking words. Correct sentences (subject-verb agreement, articles, word choice) and avoid vague phrases. Mention who uses bikes, why they're popular (cost, convenience, environment), and give a brief example or comparison. Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because they are affordable and convenient for short trips. For instance, many students and office workers prefer cycling to avoid traffic, and recently there has been growing demand for higher-end bicycles for sport and leisure.

× 'Not really, because, uh, since I was a Shard, I can't ride a bicycle yet.'

✓ 'Not really, because when I was a child, I couldn't ride a bicycle.'

'Since I was a Shard' is unclear and 'can't' is present tense and incorrect when referring to a past inability. Use past tense 'couldn't' and a clear time reference 'when I was a child.' Avoid filler words like 'uh' in written corrections.'

× 'So I have tried to ride a bicycle many times, uh, from my uh, cousin bicycle, but it's never work until I can ride a bicycle at I'm at since when I was 14.'

✓ 'So I tried to ride a bicycle many times using my cousin's bicycle, but it never worked until I could ride a bicycle when I was 14.'

The original mixes present perfect and simple past incorrectly and has incorrect verb forms and word order. Use simple past 'tried' and 'worked' for completed past events. Possession requires the possessive 'cousin's.' 'Until I could ride' uses past ability correctly and 'when I was 14' expresses the time clearly.'

× 'Yes, of course there's a lot of VI available in the market right now.'

✓ 'Yes, of course there are a lot of bikes available in the market right now.'

The contraction 'there's' is singular (there is) but refers to the plural 'a lot of VI' (likely 'bikes'). Use 'there are' for plural subjects and replace 'VI' with 'bikes.' Also 'in the market' is acceptable but 'on the market' is more natural.

× 'I have seen a lot of bicycle that have a expensive value in the market and a lot of people uh, have interest on buying it.'

✓ 'I have seen a lot of bicycles that have an expensive price in the market, and many people are interested in buying them.'

Use plural 'bicycles' to match 'a lot of.' 'That have an expensive value' is awkward; use 'have an expensive price' or 'are expensive.' 'A expensive' is incorrect article use; use 'an expensive.' 'Have interest on' is incorrect collocation; use 'are interested in.' Pronoun must agree in number: 'them' for plural bicycles.