Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant and mostly natural, but it's slightly repetitive and could be structured more clearly. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid vague phrases like “I longed to ride” without context and reduce redundancy about enjoying cycling today.

例: Yes — I had a bike when I was a child. For example, in 7th grade I would ride to school and to my friend’s house almost every day, which helped me build stamina. Consequently, I still cycle regularly now for exercise and to relax after busy days.

提案: Your answer answers the question but is brief and vague. Provide one clear reason and a specific example, and use a linking word to connect your reason to the conclusion. Replace general terms like “other purposes” with concrete examples (e.g., commuting, deliveries, short errands).

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because many people use them to commute and run short errands. For instance, in cities you often see delivery riders and office workers cycling to avoid traffic, so cycling is a convenient and economical choice.

× Yes, bikes are pretty popular in my country and people use it as a daily convenience to their jobs and other purposes.

✓ Yes, bikes are pretty popular in my country and people use them as a daily convenience for getting to their jobs and for other purposes.

The pronoun 'it' is incorrect because its antecedent 'bikes' is plural, so the plural pronoun 'them' must be used (pronoun number agreement). Also, the preposition 'to' is needed with 'getting' and 'for' clarifies 'other purposes'. Change improves clarity and grammatical agreement. Suggestions: Replace 'it' with 'them'; use 'for getting to their jobs' or 'to get to their jobs' and add 'for' before 'other purposes'.