Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is correct and concise, but it is too brief. To score higher, give a topic sentence followed by one or two short supporting details (for example, what kind of bike it was or a memory of riding it). Use a linking word if you add details and keep it within 3–4 sentences to stay natural and effective.

例: Yes, I did — I had a small red bicycle with training wheels when I was about six. I remember riding it around my neighborhood with my older cousin, and it felt very freeing. Because it was my first bike, I practiced every day until I could ride without help.

提案: Your answer addresses the question and gives reasons, but the language is informal and slightly repetitive. Improve by using clearer linking words, more precise vocabulary, and by organizing ideas: state your opinion, then give two specific reasons with brief examples. Avoid contractions like 'cause' in formal speaking and keep sentences concise.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. Firstly, many people use them because they are affordable and cheaper to maintain than cars. Secondly, they are practical for short trips in crowded areas — for example, market vendors often use bicycles to transport goods around town.

× They actually are popular in my country, specifically those people who do not have cars or tricycles or any vehicle to just go somewhere.

✓ They actually are popular in my country, especially among people who do not have cars, tricycles, or any other vehicle to get around.

Use 'especially among' to indicate the group that finds bikes popular; 'specifically those people' is awkward and ungrammatical here (incorrect preposition and noun phrase structure). Also use 'or any other vehicle' for clarity and 'to get around' is a more natural verb phrase than 'to just go somewhere'. This corrects preposition and word choice and improves sentence flow.

× Bikes are used commonly 'cause they're very easy to use and it's convenient for them and a little cheap.

✓ Bikes are commonly used because they are easy to use, convenient for people, and relatively cheap.

'Cause' is informal; use 'because' in formal speech. The original has inconsistent pronoun and adjective use: 'they're very easy to use and it's convenient for them' mixes plural and singular subjects. Replace with 'they are' and parallel adjectives 'easy to use, convenient, and relatively cheap' to maintain subject-verb agreement and parallel structure. Also move 'commonly' before the verb for natural adverb placement.