Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar, clarity and detail. Use correct past tense and clearer age expression, give a brief supporting detail (where or how you used it) and a linking word to connect ideas. Keep answers natural and within 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes. I got my first bike when I was about five or six years old, and I rode it almost every day. For example, I used it to cycle to a friend’s house and around the neighborhood, which helped me become more confident and independent.

提案: Expand the answer with a topic sentence and at least one specific supporting detail or reason, using linking words to make it coherent. Avoid one-word responses; aim for 2–3 sentences with specific examples or comparisons.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because many people use them for short trips and exercise. For instance, in cities you can often see commuters cycling to work, and there are also growing bike-sharing programs that make cycling more convenient.

× Yes, I got it when I work around 5 to 6 years old and then I use it every day.

✓ Yes, I got it when I was around 5 or 6 years old and then I used it every day.

The sentence mixes present and past tenses incorrectly. The action of obtaining the bike and using it every day happened in the past, so past tense verbs are required. Change 'work' (incorrect verb) to 'was' to indicate age in the past, and change 'use' to 'used' to match past-time reference. Also change 'to' to 'or' in the age expression for natural English: '5 or 6 years old'. Suggestion: Use past tense consistently for events that occurred in the past: 'I was around 5 or 6 years old' and 'I used it every day.'

× Yes, I got it when I work around 5 to 6 years old and then I use it every day.

✓ Yes, I got it when I was around 5 or 6 years old and then I used it every day.

The original sentence used 'work' which is the base form and incorrect for expressing age; the correct verb is 'was' (past tense of 'be'). This item flags the need for the correct past participle/past form of 'be' to express past state. Also ensure 'used' is the past form of 'use' to match the past timeframe. Suggestion: Replace incorrect verb forms with appropriate past forms: 'was' and 'used.'

× Yes, I got it when I work around 5 to 6 years old and then I use it every day.

✓ Yes, I got it when I was around 5 or 6 years old and then I used it every day.

The phrase 'work around 5 to 6 years old' misuses 'work' and 'to' in the age expression. The natural preposition/connector is 'or' in '5 or 6 years old' and 'when' should be followed by the past-state 'I was'. Suggestion: Use 'when I was around 5 or 6 years old' to express age at a past time.