Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise, fluent and grammatical. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler sounds (uh, um) and repetition. Correct grammar (e.g. 'good at riding a bicycle') and keep answer to no more than 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I had my own bicycle when I was a child. I enjoyed riding it every weekend, especially around the neighborhood park, and I became quite good at it because I practiced with my friends. As a result, I felt confident riding on busy streets by the time I was ten.

提案: Provide a clear, accurate opinion with specific supporting details and correct vocabulary. Begin with a direct statement, then give 1–2 concrete examples or reasons using linking words (for example, because, for instance). Avoid vague or incorrect words ('box', 'honey') and filler sounds. Keep it coherent and concise.

例: Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular in Korea. For example, many people use them for short commutes in cities because they are affordable and convenient, and you can see dedicated bike lanes and public bike-sharing systems in major towns.

× Yes, I had a bike, my own bike when I was a child. I used to enjoy, but uh riding bike and uh, I was a quite good at riding bicycle also yes, I.

✓ Yes, I had my own bike when I was a child. I used to enjoy riding it, and I was quite good at riding a bicycle.

The original contains sentence fragments, unnecessary pauses, and awkward word order. This fits sentence structure errors (ID 26). Corrections: combine the first two clauses into 'I had my own bike' to avoid repetition; use 'used to enjoy riding it' (verb + -ing with appropriate object) and connect ideas with 'and'. Use the article 'a' with 'bicycle' and remove 'a' before 'quite' (correct: 'quite good', not 'a quite good'). Also add the pronoun 'it' to refer to the bike.

× Uh, yes, in my view bikes are really popular in Korea. Actually most Koreans have their own box and it is umm, famous story that uh, a lot of bikes honey.

✓ Yes, in my view, bicycles are really popular in Korea. Actually, most Koreans have their own bikes, and there is a famous story that many bikes are stolen.

The original has incorrect word choice ('box' instead of 'bike' and 'honey' likely meaning 'stolen' or another word) and unclear phrasing. Treat as sentence structure/word choice error (ID 26). Corrections: use 'bicycles' or 'bikes' consistently; 'most Koreans have their own bikes' is clear and grammatical; 'there is a famous story that many bikes are stolen' gives a plausible intended meaning. Also add commas for clarity and use 'there is' for existence (There be issue reference).