Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and addresses the question directly, but you can improve fluency, reduce hesitation, and tighten sentence structure. Avoid filler words (uh) and redundant phrasing like “So no” after already saying no. Add one brief specific detail or short example to enrich the response and use a linking phrase to connect ideas (for example, ‘because’ or ‘so’). Keep it to a maximum of about 3–4 concise sentences.

例: I didn’t have a bike as a child because I wasn’t very sporty and I was afraid of falling. For example, I once watched a friend crash and that made me too nervous to try riding. As a result, I never learned to cycle.

提案: Good content and relevant reasons, but improve grammar, vocabulary choice, and sentence cohesion. Replace vague phrases like “kind of popular” with a firmer statement, remove hesitations (“uh”), and use correct collocations (e.g., ‘two-wheelers’, ‘health-conscious’). Provide one specific example or statistic if possible to strengthen the answer, and use linking words (for example, ‘because’ and ‘moreover’) correctly and succinctly.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are affordable and convenient for short trips. Many commuters and students prefer bicycles to avoid traffic and save money; for instance, in my city a large number of university students cycle to campus every day. Moreover, cycling is popular among health-conscious people as an easy form of daily exercise.

× No, I did not have a bike when I was a kid because I was not a very sporty person to begin with.

✓ No, I did not have a bike when I was a kid because I was not a very sporty person to begin with.

Sentence is already correct in past tense; no change needed. It correctly uses past simple 'did not have' and 'was' for past states.

× I was really afraid of, uh, falling down and getting hurt.

✓ I was really afraid of falling down and getting hurt.

Remove the filler 'uh' for clarity. The phrase 'afraid of falling down and getting hurt' is correct; the filler interrupts sentence flow but is not a grammar error.

× So no, I never dared up to get a cycle and try it.

✓ So no, I never dared to get a cycle and try it.

The verb 'dare' is followed by 'to' or a bare infinitive in some varieties; 'dared up to' is incorrect. Use 'dared to' + verb. Also 'get a cycle' is acceptable though 'get a bike' is more natural.

× I believe bikes are really popular in my country because many people who cannot afford car or two Wheeler vehicles prefer to use bicycle.

✓ I believe bikes are really popular in my country because many people who cannot afford a car or two-wheeler vehicles prefer to use bicycles.

Countable nouns need correct articles and plural forms: 'a car' (singular countable), 'two-wheeler vehicles' can be hyphenated, and 'bicycles' should be plural to match 'prefer to use'. Also 'car or two-wheeler vehicles' is better rendered 'a car or two-wheeler vehicles' but consider 'a car or a two-wheeler' for parallel structure.

× Moreover, bicycle is also a very healthier option for the people who are uh health enthusiastic.

✓ Moreover, bicycles are also a much healthier option for people who are health enthusiasts.

Use plural 'bicycles' to match general statement. 'Healthier' is comparative and should be modified by 'much' rather than 'very healthier' (incorrect double modifier). 'Health enthusiastic' is ungrammatical; use the noun 'health enthusiasts' or the adjective 'health-conscious'. Remove filler 'uh'.

× So I believe uh, bikes are kind of popular in my country.

✓ So I believe bikes are quite popular in my country.

Replace filler 'uh' and informal hedge 'kind of' with more natural 'quite' for a clearer, more formal response. The sentence structure is fine but wording should be improved for fluency.