Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ понятен, но можно сделать его более естественным и лаконичным: сократить слов-паразитов, убрать лишние детали и связать предложения логично. Уточните одну-две конкретные детали (например, кто вам его подарил или где вы хранили велосипед) и используйте связующие слова для плавного перехода.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small red bike that my parents gave me for my seventh birthday, but I didn’t ride it much at first because I hadn’t learned to balance yet. Later, I practiced in our yard and now I can ride comfortably.

提案: Ответ содержит идею, но выражен не очень последовательно и слишком общий. Избегайте абсолютных утверждений («No, I don't think so») без пояснения. Дайте более конкретные причины и приведите пример или сравнение, используя связующие слова (for example, however, although).

例: I wouldn’t say bikes are very popular in my country. Most people prefer cars or public transport such as taxis and the metro, so cycling is less common. However, some people do cycle for exercise or short trips, and there are separate bike lanes in several cities, which is encouraging.

× Yes, I did have a bike. It was a red one with two wheels and I remember, uh, I didn't use it that often because in that time I couldn't ride a bike, but for now I can.

✓ Yes, I had a bike. It was red and I remember I did not use it often because at that time I could not ride it, but now I can.

The original contains several issues: 'did have' is an unnecessary emphatic past form; use simple past 'had' (Grammar problem type 6 - Present tense issue referenced but actual is past tense usage; mapped to 6 per instruction to only use listed types). 'A red one with two wheels' is wordy and redundant because bikes typically have two wheels; simplified to 'It was red.' 'I didn't use it that often' is fine but 'in that time' is incorrect preposition/phrase; correct is 'at that time' (Grammar problem type 11). 'I couldn't ride a bike' is generic; better 'I could not ride it' to refer to the bike (Grammar problem type 12 pronoun use). 'But for now I can' is awkward for present ability; 'but now I can' is correct (Grammar problem type 6). Suggestions: use simple past for past facts, avoid unnecessary emphasis forms with 'did' unless contrasting, use correct time prepositions ('at that time'), keep pronoun references clear, and avoid redundant descriptions.

× No, I don't think so, because our people have their own cars and they use taxi or metro, but some of the people actually use them and we have separate roads for them.

✓ No, I do not think so, because many people own cars and use taxis or the metro, but some people cycle, and we have separated lanes for cyclists.

Multiple issues: 'our people' is awkward; use 'many people' or 'people in my country' (Grammar problem type 12 pronoun/use). 'Have their own cars' is acceptable but 'own cars' is more natural. 'They use taxi or metro' needs plural and articles: 'taxis or the metro' (Grammar problem type 22 - Article errors and 14 - quantifier). 'Some of the people actually use them' is unclear pronoun reference; better 'some people cycle' (Grammar problem type 12). 'Separate roads for them' is better as 'separated lanes for cyclists' for natural collocation (Grammar problem type 11 preposition/use and 18 order of adjectives). Suggestions: use natural collocations ('own cars', 'use taxis'), correct pluralization and articles, keep pronoun references clear, and use precise terms like 'cycle' or 'bicycle lanes'.