Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar, clarity and coherence. Give a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms and concise supporting details (max 5 sentences). Use linking words to connect ideas and specific details (e.g., age, who you rode with, where you rode). Avoid repetitions and unclear phrases.

例: Yes, I did. I had three bikes when I was a child, and I usually rode them around my neighborhood until I was about ten. I loved cycling with my friends after school, especially along the quiet streets near my house. It was a fun way to exercise and explore the area.

提案: Focus on clearer structure and specific reasons. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give two specific supporting points with linking words (for example, because, additionally). Use accurate vocabulary (e.g., subsidy, emissions) and avoid filler sounds. Provide a concise conclusion if helpful.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. Mainly this is because the government offers subsidies and builds bike lanes, which makes cycling safer and cheaper. Additionally, many people choose bikes to reduce air pollution and avoid traffic, so cycling is both practical and environmentally friendly.

× I have a three bikes in my house when I was young.

✓ I had three bikes in my house when I was young.

The original sentence uses the wrong article/number combination and the wrong tense. 'A three bikes' is incorrect because 'a' cannot be used with a plural noun; the correct form is simply 'three bikes'. Also the time reference 'when I was young' requires past tense 'had' rather than present 'have'. Suggestion: use 'had three bikes' for past possession.

× I like like rode a bike into the 50.

✓ I liked riding a bike when I was about fifty.

This sentence has multiple issues: a repeated word 'like like', incorrect mixing of 'like' with past action 'rode', and the phrase 'into the 50' is ungrammatical. To express past habitual enjoyment, use 'liked riding' (verb + -ing) or 'I used to ride'. Also 'when I was about fifty' clarifies age. Suggestion: use 'I liked riding a bike when I was about fifty' or 'I used to ride a bike when I was about fifty.'

× Moreover, in my free time I enjoy right Rd. a bike into the street around my house with my.

✓ Moreover, in my free time I enjoy riding a bike in the streets around my house with my friends.

The verb 'enjoy' must be followed by a verb in the -ing form, so 'riding' is required instead of 'right' or 'ride'. 'Rd.' is an abbreviation and inappropriate here; use 'riding'. 'Into the street around my house' should be 'in the streets around my house'. The fragment 'with my' is incomplete; likely 'with my friends' or 'with my family' is intended. Suggestion: complete the phrase and use 'enjoy riding'.

× Uh, I believe that, uh, bike is very popular in my country because of the policy from the government.

✓ Uh, I believe that bikes are very popular in my country because of government policy.

Subject-verb agreement and article use: 'bike is' treats 'bike' as singular, but the meaning asks about bikes in general, so plural 'bikes are' is appropriate. Also 'the policy from the government' is awkward; 'government policy' is more natural. Suggestion: use plural subject with plural verb for general statements: 'bikes are'.

× Uh, if many people like, abide, they can get, uh, uh, money from the government, uh, because, because like a bike can help the world, save the world, uh, reducing the emission of.

✓ If many people follow the policy, they can get money from the government because bikes can help save the world by reducing emissions.

Multiple errors: 'like, abide' is incorrect word choice; likely 'follow' or 'abide by' the policy is intended. Use 'follow the policy' or 'abide by the policy' (note 'abide by' requires 'by'). 'Get money from the government' is fine. 'Because like a bike can help the world, save the world, uh, reducing the emission of' is ungrammatical: remove filler 'like', use plural 'bikes', and express purpose with 'by reducing emissions'. 'Emission of' lacks an object; use 'emissions' instead. Suggestion: simplify and use proper prepositions: 'follow/abide by the policy' and 'by reducing emissions'.