Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant but can be improved for natural phrasing, grammatical accuracy, and conciseness. Use a topic sentence, correct word order, and one or two specific supporting details linked smoothly. Avoid repeating "bicycle" unnecessarily and correct "three wheels" to "three-wheeled".

例: Yes — I had a bike when I was a child. It was a pink, three-wheeled bicycle, and I used to ride it around my village every afternoon to visit friends and buy snacks. Because the village roads were quiet, I felt safe practising my cycling there.

提案: Good idea and contrast, but improve grammar, cohesion, and specificity. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give specific reasons and use linking words (e.g., "however", "because"). Be careful with tense and phrasing: say "bikes were more popular" and specify which groups or places you mean.

例: Bikes were more popular about twenty years ago, but their use has declined in many cities. For example, since electric scooters and motorbikes are cheaper and faster for short trips, many young people prefer them; however, bicycles remain common in rural areas and for recreational cycling.

× It was pink, three wheels bicycle.

✓ It was a pink, three-wheeled bicycle.

The sentence is missing the indefinite article 'a' before the singular noun 'bicycle' and the compound adjective describing the bicycle's wheels should be hyphenated and in adjective form: 'three-wheeled'. Use 'a' for singular countable nouns and change 'three wheels' to 'three-wheeled' to correctly modify 'bicycle'. Suggestion: Add the article 'a' and convert the noun phrase 'three wheels' into the hyphenated adjective 'three-wheeled'.

× It allowed me to bike around my village.

✓ It allowed me to ride around my village.

The verb 'bike' can be used as a noun or informal verb, but 'ride' is the more natural verb collocated with 'bicycle' in past tense contexts. Here the structure 'allowed me to + base verb' is correct, but using 'ride' is more idiomatic. Suggestion: Use 'ride' with 'bicycle' for natural phrasing ('ride a bicycle' or 'ride around').

× It used to be popular 20 years ago, but since our world has changed and technology plays a big role in our society.

✓ Bicycles used to be popular 20 years ago, but our world has changed and technology now plays a big role in society.

The original mixes 'It used to be' (singular) with a general topic and an unnecessary 'since' clause that makes the sentence awkward. 'Bicycles' should be plural to match general reference. 'Used to' already indicates past, so '20 years ago' is redundant but acceptable; better to say 'Bicycles used to be popular 20 years ago.' Also 'since' here was followed by a clause but created a fragment when combined with the next sentence. Combine into one sentence and add 'now' for clarity. Suggestion: Use plural 'Bicycles' for general statements and streamline the clause: 'Bicycles used to be popular 20 years ago, but our world has changed and technology now plays a big role in society.'

× So right now the technology electric scooter is more popular.

✓ So right now electric scooters are more popular.

The phrase 'the technology electric scooter' is incorrect in article and word order. 'Electric scooter' should be plural to indicate the general popularity of this mode of transport. Remove 'the technology' because it is unnecessary and unnatural here. Suggestion: Say 'electric scooters are more popular' to express the general trend.