Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g. "Yes, I did."), give one or two brief supporting details (age, what kind of bike, a short memory), use linking words if adding details, avoid repetition and filler words. Aim for 2–4 concise sentences and correct past tense for a past situation.

例: Yes, I did. I got my first bike when I was 11 — it was a blue mountain bike. I used to ride it to school and around my neighborhood every afternoon, which helped me feel more independent.

提案: Give a direct opinion then support it with specific reasons and a linking word. Use clearer vocabulary (e.g. "public transport" and "motorbikes") and avoid repetition. Add one specific example or brief comparison to make your point stronger. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

例: Not really. In my country people prefer public transport and motorbikes because they are faster and more convenient in traffic. For example, many commuters take buses or scooters for short trips rather than riding bicycles.

× Yes, I have, I have a bike, uh, I have a bike when I was 11 years old and.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was 11 years old.

The student used present tense 'have' with a past time reference 'when I was 11 years old'. This is a tense error (present vs past). Use past simple 'had' to match the past time. Also remove redundant repetitions and filler words to make the sentence concise. Suggestion: Use past simple for events completed in the past: 'I had a bike when I was 11.'

× Bikes are not very popular because public transport, transport and motorbikes are more common in my country.

✓ Bikes are not very popular because public transport and motorbikes are more common in my country.

The sentence used 'transport' twice ('public transport, transport'), which is a repetition and not a grammatical category here. The main issue is word choice/redundancy rather than tense, but the verb 'are' (present simple) correctly matches the general statement, so keep present tense. Remove the duplicated word to improve clarity. Suggestion: Use concise parallel items: 'public transport and motorbikes.'