Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar and clarity: use past tense consistently for past events, use correct verb forms, and avoid filler words. Provide a clear topic sentence followed by one or two supporting details using linking words. For example, say when you got the bike, who taught you, and mention a brief current situation or feeling.

例: Yes. I got my first bike when I was six years old, and my father taught me how to ride it. Since then I have kept practicing, and I still enjoy cycling for exercise and fun.

提案: Make your answer more natural and specific: start with a clear opinion, then give two concise reasons with linking words. Avoid vague phrases like “the only thing” and use concrete examples or comparisons to support your point.

例: Yes, bicycles are very popular in the Philippines. Firstly, many parents teach their children to ride as an early skill, so most people learn when they are young. Secondly, bikes are an affordable and common way for children to play and get around in neighborhoods.

× Yeah, when I was six years old, I have a bike and I still practicing it until now.

✓ Yeah, when I was six years old, I had a bike and I have been practicing it until now.

The sentence mixes past and present forms incorrectly. 'When I was six years old' establishes a past time reference, so 'have a bike' should be past 'had' (Singular and plural okay). The ongoing action continuing to present requires present perfect continuous 'have been practicing' rather than simple present 'still practicing'. Use consistent tense: past for possession in the past, present perfect continuous for an action that started in the past and continues now. Suggestion: Use 'had' for past possession and 'have been practicing' to show continued action.

× And my father taught me that, how to drive a bike and yeah.

✓ And my father taught me how to ride a bike.

The phrase contains unnecessary comma and uses 'drive' which is not the usual verb for bicycles; 'taught' is correctly past tense. Remove the comma before 'how' and use 'ride' for bicycles. Also drop filler 'and yeah' for clarity. Suggestion: Say 'my father taught me how to ride a bike.'

× Yes, bicycles here in the Philippines are very popular because this is the first step that we are taught by our parents and this is the only thing and the only play that we need to boast about playing with the other kids.

✓ Yes, bicycles in the Philippines are very popular because parents often teach children to ride them as a first skill, and playing with bikes is a common childhood activity.

The original sentence is wordy and has unclear structure and incorrect phrases like 'the only thing and the only play that we need to boast about'. Rephrase to a clearer structure: state popularity, reason (parents teach children), and that biking is a common childhood activity. Also change 'here in the Philippines' to 'in the Philippines' for natural phrasing and adjust verb forms for general present. Suggestion: Keep sentences concise and avoid literal translations like 'boast about playing' unless intended.